What appealed more to me about him...

[Rita Gil]

Is the following phrase written in correct English:
"What appealed more to me about him is the fact that his actions don't contradict his words."

 

[emsr2d2]

Re: Right or wrong?

More than what?

 

[GoesStation]

Re: Right or wrong?

Provided there's an antecedent for more (such as a previous sentence discussing his appealing features), it's correct.

Any time you write the fact that in a sentence, you should replace it with that​ and see whether the meaning changes. (Hint: it won't.)

 

[Rita Gil]

Re: Right or wrong?

Thank you for both your answers.
What about this sentence:
"What appeals most to me about him is the fact that his actions don't contradict his words."
I've tried to change the word "more".

 

[GoesStation]

Re: Right or wrong?

That's probably better. (We'd need more context to know for sure.)

You should try writing that instead of the fact that.​ Does the change affect the meaning of your sentence?

 

[Rover_KE]

Rita, I have changed your thread title.

Extract from the Posting Guidelines:

'Thread titles should include all or part of the word/phrase being discussed.'

 

[Tdol]

Re: Right or wrong?

That's probably better. (We'd need more context to know for sure.)

I actually think that works without more context.