You are better than who.

[Nasir]

Is it a complete sentence?

You are better than who.

It is a poetic line. Is it conveying the meaning?

 

[slevlife]

No. It’s not a complete sentence, doesn’t sound poetic, and it conveys nothing.

(At least, not without an accompanying paragraph/poem/song that makes sense of the line.)

 

[Nasir]

Haiku

With marked differences
I am much better than you
You're better than who

 

[5jj]

Is the last line meant to be a question? - You're better than who?

 

[slevlife]

So yeah, context can change everything. The way I read the haiku, the last line is a rhetorical question that is taunting the reader (or the author's subject). The question mark is omitted for stylistic reasons. "Who are you better than?" is perhaps a clearer way to write it (that wouldn't fit the haiku structure), and it can be interpreted as something like "Unlike me, you're not better than anyone that matters. Prove me wrong."

I'm no haiku aficionado, but in my opinion this is not very poetic.

 

[Nasir]

I'm no haiku aficionado, but in my opinion, this is not very poetic.

It seemed that you are an adept in haiku, that's why you said it's not very poetic.

 

[Nasir]

Is the last line meant to be a question? - You're better than who?

Yes.


Does the last line convey the meaning?

 

[slevlife]

Nasir, did you write the haiku? (If so, you should have mentioned that from the beginning, so we could have asked what you meant to convey.)

Aside: Probably a majority of haikus don't sound very poetic to me. I don't think the form works as well in English as it does it Japanese. But then, like I suggested in my last comment, I'm not the right person to comment on haikus since they're not my thing.

 

[slevlife]

You hid the author
The crime of the century
Under our noses

My name is slevlife
This line: seven syllables
While this one has five

 

[Nasir]

My name is slevlife
This line: seven syllables
While this one has five

This is good but one thing is missing.
Spontaneous overflow of powerful emotions.

 

[Nasir]

Nasir, did you write the haiku? (If so, you should have mentioned that from the beginning, so we could have asked what you meant to convey.)

Yes, I wrote this.
It is not about what I want to convey, it's about what are you getting.

 

[Glizdka]

I'm not a fan of or expert on haikus, but I like the "I'm better than you. You're better than who?" part.