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- Oct 3, 2010
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- English Teacher
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Last week I assigned a task of writing a memo to my students based on the following situation:
You are the organizer of a spring excursion activity in the suburbs of Beijing this weekend. Write a memorandum to remind the students of your department about the following items: the place to visit, the time and place to meet, and preparation for the activity.
Before instructing my students to write, I write a memo on my own. There must be some expressions or sentences which are not native English. So could you help me to correct it and make it more natural and coherent? Thank you!
To: All Students of Foreign Language Department
From: Zhang San, Organizer Committee member, Student Union
Date: Saturday, April 2
Subject: Spring Excursion
A spring excursion is heading to the Fragrant Hill for clear sky, mild sunshine, and fresh air you have dreamed of in the downtown! The exciting excursion is organized on Saturday, April 8 by the Student Union. Here are the details:
The loaned bus will depart from the north gate of our university at 8 a.m., arrive at around 9 a.m., and return around 2:00 p.m.. Lunch is on your own. Prepare bread, hamburgers, hot dogs, cookies, cake, snacks and bottled water in advance. The temperature of Saturday will vary from 18[FONT=宋]℃[/FONT]-27[FONT=宋]℃[/FONT]. You should wear a long-sleeved shirt and a pair of trousers. A thin coat can be added and removed as temperature changes greatly between the early morning and the midday. The most important is to wear a pair of comfortable sports shoes.
If you would like to join us, please tell Zhang San in office 203 of Teaching Building I and come to meet at the opening area, in front of Teaching Building I at 7:50 a.m., Saturday, April 8.
You are the organizer of a spring excursion activity in the suburbs of Beijing this weekend. Write a memorandum to remind the students of your department about the following items: the place to visit, the time and place to meet, and preparation for the activity.
Before instructing my students to write, I write a memo on my own. There must be some expressions or sentences which are not native English. So could you help me to correct it and make it more natural and coherent? Thank you!
Memo
To: All Students of Foreign Language Department
From: Zhang San, Organizer Committee member, Student Union
Date: Saturday, April 2
Subject: Spring Excursion
A spring excursion is heading to the Fragrant Hill for clear sky, mild sunshine, and fresh air you have dreamed of in the downtown! The exciting excursion is organized on Saturday, April 8 by the Student Union. Here are the details:
The loaned bus will depart from the north gate of our university at 8 a.m., arrive at around 9 a.m., and return around 2:00 p.m.. Lunch is on your own. Prepare bread, hamburgers, hot dogs, cookies, cake, snacks and bottled water in advance. The temperature of Saturday will vary from 18[FONT=宋]℃[/FONT]-27[FONT=宋]℃[/FONT]. You should wear a long-sleeved shirt and a pair of trousers. A thin coat can be added and removed as temperature changes greatly between the early morning and the midday. The most important is to wear a pair of comfortable sports shoes.
If you would like to join us, please tell Zhang San in office 203 of Teaching Building I and come to meet at the opening area, in front of Teaching Building I at 7:50 a.m., Saturday, April 8.