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    proofread and edit cover letter paragraph


    I would like to know what mistakes there are in this paragprah.
    Thank you.

    "I chose your school ever since 2010, when I first met one of your faculty members, professor X, at one class she taught in London. I was dazzled by her knowledge of journalism and by her passion and determination to keep this profession alive at the highest standards through the lessons she taught around the world; it is because of Xs recommendation that I listed your school as my top priority for my study goal. My decision was enhanced by my many journalism friends and colleagues, former graduates of your school, who boasted about the immense career opportunity that came with being part of a Harvard program."

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    Re: proofread and edit cover letter paragraph


    I decided I wanted to attend your school back in 2010....

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