Some comments about your introduction:
- It's important be direct right from the start of an essay. Do not go around the topic, as that only confuses the reader as to what you're going to talk about. Your first sentence in the essay should introduce the topic to the reader.
- The second sentence (or two) can elaborate on the opening sentence to give more background about the topic.
- Pay attention to your spelling. The spell checker should alert you to such mistakes as "hundre"
- Avoid making up complicated sentences such as this:
"I now strongly believed that our voice will be heard rather clearer by our actions not by our voice."
You can just say "I strongly believe that actions are more important and fruitful than mere words."
- Finally, yes it's OK to use quoted words in formal essays to indicate that the text is being used for a non-standard meaning.
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