worledit
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Hello everyone! I've just received my writing from my teacher and It's hard for me to believe that I had just 4 errors. He said that with this Essay I would pass CAE (C1) exam. What's your opinion? and do you see any other mistake?
The exercise was something like "Write an essay about what type of book is most important to read nowadays fiction, history or Science. Discuss two of the books named and explain which one is most important and why".
Nowadays, It is a well-established fact that a good book is essential to grow as a person. Sitting on the couch or on the towel at the beach, [STRIKE]it does no matter[/STRIKE] regardless of where we are, there is always free time to learn by ourselves reading a book. Although there are so many types, what kind of book is more beneficial to read?
Firstly, it is not only important to keep up-to-date but also to know our past history. There are those who claim that we should focus on the present and forget about what happened many years ago. However, fortunately, there are people who give History the importance it deserves. They are of the opinion that we learn from our mistakes and reading a history book about our past errors can help us to form [STRIKE]properly[/STRIKE] the building blocks of our life properly.
Another area which is gaining importance little by little is Technology. Currently, technological breakthroughs are changing our society. Technology is a worldwide aspect in our daily life that affects our [STRIKE]works[/STRIKE] jobs, our relationships, our leisure time, and so on. Therefore, it is imperative for us to learn how to use it. [STRIKE]Science books[/STRIKE] Books on Science can help us to achieve that goal.
From my point of view, both types of books need to be taken into account. Nevertheless, I hold the view that, whereas Technology is easily learnt through hands-on activities, History can be learnt page by page, reading many books. To sum up, despite the fact that both areas are of huge relevance in our lives, learning History through written work such as books is more effective.
The exercise was something like "Write an essay about what type of book is most important to read nowadays fiction, history or Science. Discuss two of the books named and explain which one is most important and why".
Nowadays, It is a well-established fact that a good book is essential to grow as a person. Sitting on the couch or on the towel at the beach, [STRIKE]it does no matter[/STRIKE] regardless of where we are, there is always free time to learn by ourselves reading a book. Although there are so many types, what kind of book is more beneficial to read?
Firstly, it is not only important to keep up-to-date but also to know our past history. There are those who claim that we should focus on the present and forget about what happened many years ago. However, fortunately, there are people who give History the importance it deserves. They are of the opinion that we learn from our mistakes and reading a history book about our past errors can help us to form [STRIKE]properly[/STRIKE] the building blocks of our life properly.
Another area which is gaining importance little by little is Technology. Currently, technological breakthroughs are changing our society. Technology is a worldwide aspect in our daily life that affects our [STRIKE]works[/STRIKE] jobs, our relationships, our leisure time, and so on. Therefore, it is imperative for us to learn how to use it. [STRIKE]Science books[/STRIKE] Books on Science can help us to achieve that goal.
From my point of view, both types of books need to be taken into account. Nevertheless, I hold the view that, whereas Technology is easily learnt through hands-on activities, History can be learnt page by page, reading many books. To sum up, despite the fact that both areas are of huge relevance in our lives, learning History through written work such as books is more effective.
