A Indian Movie: Rest in peace

[Gaya87]

Hi, can you please check the following sentences? Thank you

Long Summary
A touching tale of the highs and lows of life which depicts a strong point of life lessons when a family's breadwinner suddenly dies of a heart attack and that leaves a deep trauma to his family. At his funeral, family members are fighting over who should get his property and retirement funds. It also reflects the irrevocable impact faces by his family.

Short summary
Unexpectedly a family's breadwinner dies and that leaves a deep trauma to his family. How his sudden death affects his family and those around him?

 

[Gaya87]

Can I say: It also reflects the irrevocable challenges faces by his family.

 

[teechar]

Long Summary
A touching tale of the highs and lows of life, which depicts [STRIKE]a strong point of[/STRIKE] the importance life's lessons when a family's breadwinner suddenly dies of a heart attack and [STRIKE]that leaves a deep trauma to[/STRIKE] his family are traumatized. At his funeral, family members are fighting over who should get his property and retirement funds. It also reflects the irrevocable impact faces by his family.

Short summary
Unexpectedly, a family's breadwinner dies and that [STRIKE]leaves[/STRIKE] causes a deep trauma to his family. How will his sudden death affect his family and friends? [STRIKE]those around him?[/STRIKE]

Can I say "It also reflects the irrevocable challenges faced by his family?"

I don't understand the text in blue.

 

[Gaya87]

I don't understand the text in blue.

It’s something like this, basically a sudden, unexpected death is challenging, so what are the challenges faced among the family members?

 

[teechar]

Long Summary
This is a touching tale of the highs and lows of life, which depicts the importance [STRIKE]a strong point[/STRIKE] of life's lessons when a family's breadwinner suddenly dies of a heart attack and [STRIKE]that leaves a deep trauma to[/STRIKE] his family are traumatized. At his funeral, family members are fighting over who should get his property and retirement funds. [STRIKE]It also reflects[/STRIKE] The movie portrays the [STRIKE]irrevocable impact[/STRIKE] challenges faced by his family.

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[Gaya87]

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How about this:

A touching tale of the highs and lows of life, the movie depicts the sudden death of a family’s breadwinner caused by heart attack. The traumatized immediate family, moreover, has to face their other family members who are fighting over his wealth in his funeral ceremony. How are they going to be able to face other challenges, but still to stick with each other as a family?

 

[teechar]

No, it's not better.

 

[Gaya87]

No, it's not better.

Noted, teechar. Is the last line sounds good for you?

This is a touching tale of the highs and lows of life, which depicts the importance of life's lessons when a family's breadwinner suddenly dies of a heart attack and his family are traumatized. At his funeral, family members are fighting over who should get his property and retirement funds. How are they going to be able to face other challenges with each other?

 

[teechar]

Noted, teechar. [STRIKE]Is[/STRIKE] Does the last line sounds good [STRIKE]for[/STRIKE] to you?

How are they going to be able to face other challenges together? [STRIKE]with each other?[/STRIKE]

See above.