a short message about health

[Paul!]

I was going to write a short message about state of my health:

Next week very busy with medical stuff to investigate some growth under my right eye. They take eye things very seriously. At least I can still us my one non "immobilized" eyeball to watch some stuff on TV.

 

[GoesStation]

I was going to write a short message about the state of my health:

Next week I'll be very busy with medical stuff to investigate [STRIKE]some[/STRIKE] a growth under my right eye. They take eye things very seriously. At least I can still use my one non-immobilized [no quotation marks] [STRIKE]"immobilized"[/STRIKE] eyeball to watch some stuff on TV.

See above.

 

[Tarheel]

I was going to write a short message about the state of my health.

I think you mean:

I have written a short message about the state of my health.

By "under" do you mean "beneath"?

Who is "They"? Doctors?

 

[Paul!]

I was going to write a short message about the state of my health.

That's only the part of the massage which I was going to write. I thought about a possibility of writing something like this. The message itself hasn't been written yet.

By "under" do you mean "beneath"?

I think you are right. As you can see I"m learning English from the internet. I apologize for bleeding eyes to those who suffer when reading my posts.

Who is "They"? Doctors?

Yes

 

[Tarheel]

I was going to write a short message about state of my health:

As you can see, that's what you said, not what I said.

When we say we were going to do something that means we meant to do it, but we didn't. (That is not, I think, what you meant.)

 

[Tarheel]

The message itself hasn't been written yet.

In that case, nobody can read it.

 

[emsr2d2]

That's only [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] one part of the message [STRIKE]which[/STRIKE] that I was going to write. I thought about [STRIKE]a[/STRIKE] the possibility of writing something like this. The message itself hasn't been written yet.

I think you are right. As you can see I"m learning English from the internet. I apologize for the bleeding eyes [STRIKE]to those who[/STRIKE] some people might suffer when reading my posts.

Yes.

Note my corrections above.

 

[Paul!]

Any help appreciated. So if I replace that with "I was thinking about writing a short message about the state of my health. How about this:" then it will be correct, right? Could you lend me a helping hand with it?

 

[emsr2d2]

That's OK, but I'd open with "I'm thinking about ..." or "I've been thinking about ...". Saying "I was thinking about" seems to suggest you're no longer considering it.

 

[tedmc]

I don't think having a growth beneath/at the bottom part of your eyeball would immobilise it.