achievement at work accounted for the largest proportion in both figures

[AnaEng]

I am practicing for IELTS task 1, I want to compare two pie charts.

I want to say that being with family is the lowest category for people over 30 and travelling is also the lowest reason for happiness for people under 30.

I came up with these sentences:

1- Overall, achievement at work accounted for the largest proportion in both figures. Meanwhile, being with family was the lowest category for people over 30, and people under 30 believe traveling is the lowest reason for happiness.

2-Overall, achievement at work accounted for the largest proportion in both figures. In contrast, being with family was the lowest category for people over 30, people under 30 believe traveling is the lowest reason for happiness.

3-Overall, achievement at work accounted for the largest proportion in both figures, while being with family was the lowest category in people over 30, people under 30 believe traveling is the lowest reason for happiness.

4-Overall, achievement at work accounted for the largest proportion in both figures. In contrast, being with family was the lowest category for people over 30 and so were people under 30 believe traveling is the lowest reason for happiness.

 

[teechar]

Note that I have moved your thread to our Editing and Writing Topics section.

I am practicing for IELTS task 1, and I want to compare two pie charts.

I want to say that being with family is the lowest category for people over 30 and travelling is also the lowest reason for happiness for people under 30.

The underlined parts don't work.

I came up with these sentences :

1- Overall, achievement at work accounted for the largest proportion in both figures/charts, whereas Meanwhile, being with family and traveling were was the lowest category smallest sectors in the chart for people over 30, and in that for people under 30, respectively. believe traveling is the lowest reason for happiness.

See above.

 

[AnaEng]

Thanks.

Can I use sectors and fraction for both pie chart and bar graph ?

 

[teechar]

Can I use "sectors" and "fraction" for (both) pie charts and bar graphs?

The word "sector" only works with pie charts. For bar graphs, you can use "proportion".