admissions status

[it-is-niaz]

Could you please check the following?

Dear Professor X,
I am writing to inquire about my admissions status at Z University. In fact, I have been admitted to one of the US universities but I have not yet accepted it. That is because I have face with the dilemma of choosing between Australian and US University. You might know that the final day to accept US universities’ offer is due to April 15[SUP]th[/SUP]. So, I really need to know in what stage my application status is. In that case, I can make my final decision.
I would be so grateful if you could tell me if I am eligible for your university or not.
I am looking forwards to hearing from you.
Best Regards,
Niaz

 

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Could you please check the following?

Dear Professor X,

I am writing to inquire about [STRIKE]my admissions[/STRIKE] the status of my application for admission into [STRIKE]at[/STRIKE] Z University. In fact, I have been [STRIKE]admitted to[/STRIKE] offered a place at one [STRIKE]of the US[/STRIKE] university in the US, [STRIKE]ies[/STRIKE] but I have not yet accepted it. That is because I [STRIKE]have face with the dilemma of[/STRIKE] am still considering whether I should choose [STRIKE]ing between[/STRIKE] an Australian university or one in the [STRIKE]and[/STRIKE] US. [STRIKE]University. You might know that[/STRIKE] The final day to accept the offer from the US [STRIKE]universities’ offer[/STRIKE] is [STRIKE]due to[/STRIKE] April 15[SUP]th[/SUP]. So, I really need to know [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] what stage my application for your university [STRIKE]status[/STRIKE] is at. [STRIKE]In that case, I can[/STRIKE] I would like to know that in order to make my final decision.

I would be so grateful if you could tell me [STRIKE]if I am eligible[/STRIKE] whether my application for your university has been successful. [STRIKE]or not.[/STRIKE]

Thank you, and I am looking [STRIKE]forwards[/STRIKE] forward to hearing from you.

[STRIKE]Best Regards,
[/STRIKE]

Yours sincerely,

Niaz Johnson

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