After George had stacked all the logs into

[Bassim]

Have I made any mistakes? I'm not sure if my last sentence sounds natural.

After George had stacked all the logs into a woodshed, he sat on the threshold and lit a cigarette. He was savouring the smoke that filled his lungs and made him relaxed. He kept it for a few moments before blowing it out into a cold winter day. After job was done, nothing tasted better than a cigarette.

 

[GoesStation]

I see three article-related problems. The first one has to do with how many woodsheds George might be filling.

A phrasal verb is missing its preposition.

 

[Bassim]

I used "a woodshed" because I wrongly believed I named it for the first time, and therefore I used "a".
Regarding a phrasal verb, should it be "lit up a cigarette"?
It should be " the cold winter day" and "after the job was done."

 

[Tarheel]

Have I made any mistakes? I'm not sure if my last sentence sounds natural.

After George put all the logs into the woodshed, he sat on the threshold and lit a cigarette. He enjoyed the smoke that filled his lungs and made him relaxed. He puffed on it for a while before putting it out. After the job was done, nothing tasted better than a cigarette.

Although I know what you mean to say, I had never heard of blowing out a cigarette. (If you're blowing on it wouldn't you still be smoking, not stopping?)

 

[GoesStation]

I used "a woodshed" because I wrongly believed I named it for the first time, and therefore I used "a". :tick:
Regarding a phrasal verb, should it be "lit up a cigarette"? :cross:
It should be " the cold winter day" and "after the job was done." :tick:

It's the woodshed because the reader pictures George's back yard ("garden" in British English) and sees only one woodshed in it.

The missing preposition was in, in he kept it in.

 

[tedmc]

he kept it in.

What about "he held it"?

 

[Bassim]

Tarheel,

I wanted to accentuate the moments when George was holding the smoke in his lungs and then exhaling it into the cold air, and therefore I used "before blowing it out."

I believe I should have written this.
"He enjoyed the smoke that filled his lungs and made him relaxed. He kept it in for a few moments before breathing it out into the cold air."

 

[emsr2d2]

I'd say he held the smoke down.

 

[YAMATO2201]

He kept it for a few moments before blowing it out into a cold winter day.

The missing preposition was in, in he kept it in.

Is the following version OK?

He held it in for a little longer than usual before blowing it out into the cold winter air.

 

[GoesStation]

Is the following version OK?

He held it in for a little longer than usual before blowing it out into the cold winter air.

Yes.

 

[tedmc]

When a person paused breathing momentarily, do we say "he held his breath" or "he held his breath in"?
Do we need "in"?

 

[GoesStation]

When a person paused breathing momentarily, do we say "he held his breath":tick: or "he held his breath in":cross:?
Do we need "in"?

No. It's not natural.