And the army is a good reason to stop living a postponed life

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Can you please check if my English sounds natural?

"And the army is a good reason to stop living a postponed life. Because no one has canceled the accident. The less you save for tomorrow, the more you will have in your life today."
 
No. The first sentence makes no sense without knowing what comes before.

The second part is not a sentence.

I fail to see how those three thoughts are connected.
 
No. The first sentence makes no sense without knowing what comes before.

The second part is not a sentence.

I fail to see how those three thoughts are connected.
Does this soundsbetter?

The army motivates you to really live for today because an accident can happen in the future. The less you put away for later, the more you have got for today.
 
Does this soundsbetter?
The first sentence sounds like an unsuccessful attempt at an advertising slogan for an army careers drive. The second is what some politicians think but never dare say.
 
The first sentence sounds like an unsuccessful attempt at an advertising slogan for an army careers drive. The second is what some politicians think but never dare say.
But do those two sentences correct from grammatical and lexical viewpoint? Thank you
 
If you just said The army motivates you to live for the moment, you could get rid of the bit about an accident.
 
"Accidents" happen in civilian life not in war (if you meant getting killed or wounded), don't they?
 
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