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contiluo

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Please help me make the following paragraph sound natural. Thanks.

Hi, everybody! My name is Eric. I am a fifteen-year-old boy. I am a Virgo. I am very happy to be one of the members of EGRC. My classmates tell me that I am an energetic and easygoing person. It is because I'm always ready to assist others and take it calmly when something goes wrong. In addition, I am always an understanding listener when my classmates confide in me.
 
Hi everybody! My name is Eric. I am a fifteen-year-old boy. I am a Virgo, and I am very happy to be one of the members of EGRC. [What is that?] My classmates tell me that I am an energetic and easygoing person. [STRIKE]It is[/STRIKE] That's because I'm always ready to assist others, and [STRIKE]take it[/STRIKE] I calmly deal with the situation when something goes wrong. In addition, I am always an understanding listener when my classmates confide in me.
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I find it a little strange that your classmates have to tell you that you're energetic and easy-going. You could say "My classmates say I am energetic ..." or "My classmates tell people that I am energetic ...". I'm sure you already know that you're energetic and easygoing.
 
My classmates tell me that I am an energetic and easygoing person. That's because I'm always ready to assist others

Is the following is correct as well?

My classmates tell me that I am an energetic and easygoing person, because I'm always ready to assist others
 
Is the following [STRIKE]is[/STRIKE] correct as well?

My classmates tell me that I am an energetic and easygoing person, because I'm always ready to assist others.
It's okay.
 
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