Diary - Yesterday afternoon, I drank a coffee

[Maybo]

This is an entry from my diary. Please check it and correct any mistakes.

Yesterday afternoon, I drank a coffee, and it made my heart beat stronger than usual. I was afraid I would die, so I slept in nervous. I didn't know if I was too nervous, and that made me have a strange dream. A power pulled me up from my bed and tried to push me out the door. Then, I thought I was awake, but again, I was pulled up. This time, I kept shouting "mum", but I couldn't hear my voice. Finally, I woke up with my clenching fists.

 

[emsr2d2]

This is an entry from my diary. Please check it and correct any mistakes.

Yesterday afternoon, I drank a coffee, and it made my heart beat stronger harder/faster than usual. I was afraid I would die, so I slept in nervous nervously. I didn't know if I was too the fact that I was very nervous no comma here and that made me have a strange dream - an imaginary power pulled me up from my bed and tried to push me out the door. Then no comma here I thought I was awake, but again, I was pulled up out of bed. This time, I kept shouting "Mum", but I couldn't hear my voice no sound came out. Finally, I woke up with my clenching my fists.

 

[Tarheel]

I would say:

Yesterday afternoon, I drank some coffee.

And:

I woke up from my dream with my fists clenched.

@Maybo, are you unused to coffee?

 

[Maybo]

@Maybo, are you unused to coffee?

I drink coffee sometimes, but this coffee made me feel unwell.

 

[Tarheel]

I drink coffee sometimes, but this coffee made me feel unwell.

Maybe it was too strong.