Diary - Yesterday my mum and I walked for a long time so we have sore feet today.

[Maybo]

This is an entry from my diary. Please check it and correct any mistakes.

Yesterday my mum and I walked for a long time so we have sore feet today. We've decided that we're going to lay on our bed for the entire day and not going to anywhere. Yesterday was great but the only thing I wasn't happy with was the smell of the shopping malls. In recent years, many of them have used a strong scent inside the malls to impress customers. However, have they thought of that maybe we don't the smell? I felt nauseated browsing a mall yesterday and left just in 10 minutes.

 

[Tarheel]

Try:

We've decided that we're going to stay in bed all day and not go anywhere.

Also:

However, did it occur to them that some people wouldn't like the smell? I felt nauseated while browsing a mall yesterday and left in just ten minutes.

 

[Maybo]

What's the difference between "did it occur to them" and "have they thought of "?

 

[emsr2d2]

Yesterday, my mum and I walked for a long time so we have sore feet today.

I'd probably say "... went for a really long walk" and "our feet are sore".

We've decided that we're going to lay lie on our beds for the entire day and not going to go anywhere.

I assume you and your mother do not share a bed, so you need the plural noun.
Study the difference between "lie" and "lay".

Yesterday was great but the only thing I wasn't happy with was the smell of the shopping malls.

This is a really odd sentence! You haven't mentioned malls at all. I assumed, until now, that you and your mum went out for a walk - in nature, or by a river, or something similar. On this basis, I'd change your opening to something like "Yesterday, my mum and I walked for miles round shopping malls".

In recent years, many of them have used pumped a strong scent inside the malls into the shopping area to impress entice customers.

I don't think they do it to impress people. This trick is used extensively in retail. Supermarkets sometimes pump the smell of fresh bread from the ventilation system and it entices people to visit the bakery section.

However, have they thought of considered the fact that maybe we some people don't like the smell?

I felt nauseated browsing a mall yesterday and left after just in 10 ten minutes.

 

[Tarheel]

What's the difference between "did it occur to them" and "have they thought of "?

Not a lot.

 

[Tarheel]

I have never had sore feet because of walking a lot. You might want to consider getting different shoes. (I have walked all the way downtown and all the way back, but not in the same day. (They call it "uptown" here.))

 

[Maybo]

I have never had sore feet because of walking a lot. You might want to consider getting different shoes. (I have walked all the way downtown and all the way back, but not in the same day. (They call it "uptown" here.))

I walked for five hours yesterday but I had some rest in between. I wear sneakers every day. I can’t find better shoes.