Does this short paragraph makes sense at all? I look in the mirror and see my flaws,

[B45]

Does this short paragraph makes sense at all?

I look in the mirror and see my flaws, while others look in the mirror and play God. I haven’t followed a faith for decades, but the God I know is there, and his judgments are upon thy(me). I live in a society where freedom and choice are what lies in the foundation of its constitution. Don’t make me slave of your single belief while you carry your red flags trying to fix a broken system that can never be fixed. You don’t understand how the head got there but only watch its manifestation like blindfolded pawns being lead to a battle that can’t be won because it’s against yourselves. Our stands may differ and it may forever be so, but as nature takes us away from here, ask yourselves, what have you done for the human existence.

 

[emsr2d2]

Does this short paragraph [STRIKE]makes[/STRIKE] make sense at all?

I look in the mirror and see my flaws, while others look in the mirror and play God. I haven’t followed a faith for decades, but the God I know is there, and his judgments are upon thy(me). (I don't get this. Thyme is a herb.) I live in a society where freedom and choice are what [STRIKE]lies[/STRIKE] lie [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] at the foundation of its constitution. Don’t make me a slave [STRIKE]of[/STRIKE] to your single belief while you carry your red flags trying to fix a broken system that can never be fixed. You don’t understand how the head got there but only watch its manifestation like blindfolded pawns being [STRIKE]lead[/STRIKE] led to a battle that can’t be won because it’s against yourselves. Our stands may differ and it may forever be so, but as nature takes us away from here, ask yourselves, what have you done for [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] human existence.

Note my changes above, in red. I can't say it "makes sense" to me but that's because I just don't really understand what you're getting at. On that basis, I have only changed the grammatical/spelling errors. I don't get the "thy(me)" part at all.

 

[B45]

but the God I know is there, and his judgments are upon thy. - Doesn't thy alsomean me?

What I'm trying to say is that we are all human and have flaws so instead of judging one another about our choices in life why not start with ourselves and make the world a better place.



I look in the mirror and see my faults, while others look in the mirror and play God. I haven’t followed a faith for decades, but the God I know is there, and his judgments are upon thy (me?).(I don't get this. Thyme is a herb.) I live in a society where freedom and choice are what lie at the foundation of its constitution. Don’t make me a slave to your single belief while you carry your red flags trying to fix a broken system that can never be fixed. You don’t understand how the head got there but only watch its manifestation like blindfolded pawns being led to a battle that can’t be won because it’s against yourselves. Our stands may differ and it may forever be so, but as nature takes us away from here, ask yourselves, what have you done for human existence.

You are true. I am sick. Judge me more, hypocrites. I'm still here loving and laughing each and every moment of my life. Howbeit, I have changed and will continue to grow to become a better man.

I've added the underlined part. Please take a look at it. Thanks!

 

[tedmc]

...judgements are upon thee.(the old 3rd pronoun for 'you').

not a teacher

 

[Polyester]

Note my changes above, in red. I can't say it "makes sense" to me but that's because I just don't really understand what you're getting at. On that basis, I have only changed the grammatical/spelling errors. I don't get the "thy(me)" part at all.

Hello, teacher
I have a question that I don't understand.
Please look at below sentence which I quoted from the top at this topic.
Does this short paragraph makes sense at all?

at all = nothing
In this sentence, If I omit at all, it's make sense for me.
But,If I keep the at all at this sentence, the sentence doesn't mean make sense.

Please explain to me, thank you!

 

[MikeNewYork]

In that use, "at all" means "in any way".

 

[B45]

How does the whole paragraph look to you MikeNewYork? Do you understand it and know the message I'm trying to convey?

I look in the mirror and see my faults, while others look in the mirror and play God. I haven’t followed a faith for decades, but the God I know is there, and his judgments are upon thee (me?).(I don't get this. Thyme is a herb.) I live in a society where freedom and choice are what lie at the foundation of its constitution. Don’t make me a slave to your single belief while you carry your red flags trying to fix a broken system that can never be fixed. You don’t understand how the head got there but only watch its manifestation like blindfolded pawns being led to a battle that can’t be won because it’s against yourselves. Our stands may differ and it may forever be so, but as nature takes us away from here, ask yourselves, what have you done for human existence. You are true. I am sick. Judge me more, hypocrites. I'm still here loving and laughing each and every moment of my life. Howbeit, I have changed and will continue to grow to become a better man.

 

[bhaisahab]

If you are referring to yourself "thee" is wrong. It should be "me". What is the reference to Thyme about?

 

[emsr2d2]

I think I finally worked out that there was a space missing. The OP meant, I think, to write:

... his judgements are upon thy (me?).

 

[B45]

How does the whole paragraph sound to y'all? Do you understand it and know the message I'm trying to convey?

I look in the mirror and see my faults, while others look in the mirror and play God. I haven’t followed a faith for decades, but the God I know is there, and his judgments are upon thy (me?).(I don't get this. Thyme is a herb.) I live in a society where freedom and choice are what lie at the foundation of its constitution. Don’t make me a slave to your single belief while you carry your red flags trying to fix a broken system that can never be fixed. You don’t understand how the head got there but only watch its manifestation like blindfolded pawns being led to a battle that can’t be won because it’s against yourselves. Our stands may differ and it may forever be so, but as nature takes us away from here, ask yourselves, what have you done for human existence. You are true. I am sick. Judge me more, hypocrites. I'm still here loving and laughing each and every moment of my life. Howbeit, I have changed and will continue to grow to become a better man.

 

[MikeNewYork]

Batman, I find the paragraph to be confusing.

 

[B45]

Sure, could you elaborate? What's confusing to you.

 

[Tarheel]

I have made a couple of corrections/suggestions.

I look in the mirror and see my faults, while others look in the mirror and see a god. I haven’t followed a faith for decades, but the God I know is there, and his judgments are upon me. I live in a society where freedom and choice are what lie at the foundation of its constitution. Don’t make me a slave to your single belief while you carry your red flags trying to fix a broken system that can never be fixed. You don’t understand how the head got there but only watch its manifestation like blindfolded pawns being led to a battle that can’t be won because it’s against yourselves. Our stands may differ and it may forever be so, but as nature takes us away from here, ask yourselves what have you have done for humanity.

I deleted the last couple of sentences because of the weirdness factor.

 

[MikeNewYork]

I think Tarheel did a nice job removing most of the confusion.

 

[B45]

Thank you very much Tarheel!

Can this be a standalone paragraph then:


You are true. I am sick. Judge me more, hypocrites. I'm still here loving and laughing each and every moment of my life. Howbeit, I have changed and will continue to grow to become a better man.

 

[B45]

You don’t understand how the head got there but only watch its manifestation like blindfolded pawns being led to a battle that can’t be won because it’s against yourselves. Our stands may differ and it may forever be so, but as nature takes us away from here, ask yourselves what have you have done for humanity.

The bold doesn't look right.

 

[MikeNewYork]

It is not correct. It is phrased as a question without being a question. Change "what have you done" to "what you have done".

 

[B45]

What about this sentence:

You are true. I am sick. Judge me more, hypocrites. I'm still here loving and laughing each and every moment of my life. Howbeit, I have changed and will continue to grow to become a better man.

 

[bhaisahab]

Mostly nonsense.

 

[B45]

Hahahaha. Thanks for breaking my spirit... Those are my true feelings and how I really feel about life sometimes.