[Essay] dream job

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contiluo

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With regard to my career planning, I would like to be a doctor. I possess the top characteristics of commitment, passion and love of humanity. I love the satisfaction of helping people and I think a medical career will give me the skills to help those most in need. I have watched a lot of Korean dramas about doctors, such as Descendants of the Sun and Doctors. Those dramas enlighten me that a physician's sacred duty is to heal the sick. Being a doctor can not only alleviate the sufferings of patients, bring the dying back to life, but also can receive the thankfulness and respect from them. That is why being a doctor is my dream job which is the most rewarding journey that I will ever experience.
 
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