Few years ago a palm reader told a girl that she would get married again

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tufguy

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Few years ago a palm reader told a girl that she would get married again. That girl was a divorcee and had a kid but she didn't want to get married again at all. That palm reader told her that she would definitely get married and the person she would get married to would have lost his father in his childhood. He also told her that she would have two kids one boy and one girl. She already had a son. After a few years she got married to a person whose father had died in his childhood and she gave birth to a girl as well.

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A few years ago, a palm reader foretold a girl that she would get married again. That girl was a divorcee and had a kid but she didn't want to get married again at all. That palm reader told her that she would definitely get married and the person she would get married to would have lost his father in his childhood. He also told her that she would have two kids, one boy and one girl. She already had a son. After a few years, she got married to [STRIKE]a person[/STRIKE] someone whose father had died in his childhood and she later gave birth to a girl as well.

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A few years ago, a palm reader foretold a girl that she would get married again.

I don't believe "foretold" is used properly in this sentence. I would also use "the" before girl since we are talking about a specific girl here.

A few years ago, a palm reader foretold that the girl would get married again.
 
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