[Grammar] Final sentences of a cover letter

[Peachi]

Dear Teachers &/or Native speakers,

I am not sure about grammar and word order. Please could anybody have a look at these two paragraphs, especially the last one. Many thanks in advance.


As I am Multilingual assistant by profession I would love the opportunity to work in a British company where I can contribute my customer service skills and knowledge about the German market.
Because of different jobs in the service sector and in the office, I offer you a structured assistant with excellent communication skills keeping the overview in turbulent times and also represent your company international in an adequate way.

 

[emsr2d2]

Dear Teachers &/or Native speakers,

I am not sure about grammar and word order. Please could anybody have a look at these two paragraphs, especially the last one. Many thanks in advance.


As I am Multilingual assistant by profession I would love the opportunity to work in a British company where I can contribute my customer service skills and knowledge about the German market.
Because of different jobs in the service sector and in the office, I offer you a structured assistant with excellent communication skills keeping the overview in turbulent times and also represent your company international in an adequate way.

The first thing I suggest you change is the word "adequate". It means "barely acceptable", "just about OK". I wouldn't want to employ someone adequate, I want to employ someone amazing, incredible, brilliant, spectacular. I am not suggesting you use any of those words but please don't use "adequate".

 

[MikeNewYork]

Dear Teachers &/or Native speakers,

I am not sure about grammar and word order. Please could anybody have a look at these two paragraphs, especially the last one. Many thanks in advance.


As I am Multilingual assistant by profession, I would love the opportunity to work in a British company where I can contribute my customer service skills and knowledge about the German market.
Because of my having had different jobs in the service sector and in the office, I offer you a structured assistant with excellent communication skills, keeping the overview in turbulent times and also representing your company internationally in a positive way.

I agree with emsr about "adequate". I have made a few corrections above.

 

[billmcd]

Dear Teachers &/or Native speakers,

I am not sure about grammar and word order. Please could anybody have a look at these two paragraphs, especially the last one. Many thanks in advance.


[STRIKE]As [/STRIKE] I am a Multilingual assistant by profession and I [STRIKE] would love [/STRIKE] am eager for the opportunity to work in a British company where I can contribute my customer service skills and knowledge about the German market.
Because [STRIKE] of different [/STRIKE] I have performed a variety of jobs in the service sector and in the office, I am confident that I can offer you a [STRIKE] structured [/STRIKE] skilled assistant with excellent communication skills, [STRIKE] keeping the overview [/STRIKE] while maintaining the objectives of the enterprise especiallyin [STRIKE] turbulent [/STRIKE] times of instability in the global economy and [STRIKE] also [/STRIKE] consistently representing your company internationally in [STRIKE] an adequate [/STRIKE] a professional [STRIKE] way[/STRIKE] manner. [/QUOTE] Suggestions.