Fitting İn

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I wanted to write an essay about fitting in. There is an writing activity in an English learning book that I'm studying. There are some topics and I chose this topic.



There are three main fitting in context: fitting in a different group in terms of culture, race or religion; fitting in a different group in terms of class; fitting in a different group in terms of personal traits.

In the context of fitting in a different group or society in terms of culture, race or religion, the process can be really long. Because these concepts have profound effects on people. They cover a big deal of every day life. In adittion the group or the society has more responsibility in this context. Because fitting in a different group in terms of these features can be quite traumatic and difficult for a person. Especially if this person hadn't chosen willingly to be in that group or society. This can cause a feeling of being torn up by the roots. It can be painful. Because of that the host society or group should be tolerant. But of course all of this don't remove the individual's responsibility of integration.

The other context is class difference. In my opinion this is the easiest one, at least by one aspect which is that it is more predictable. Moreover class difference doesn't have the profound effect on individual as cultural/racial/religious difference has. Even if the group or society and the individual don't have harmony, they can still develop a stable and consistent relationship.

The other context is the difference in terms of personal traits. There can be a vast difference between the group and the person. This can make the person self-conscious. However I believe that through some people that the person feel closer he or she can establish a bond with the group.

In short I believe fitting in is an important topic because people are social beings and the feeling of togetherness is what makes life colorful. Once I heard a metaphor that liken a life without friends to a garden that has no flowers
 
I wanted to write an essay about fitting in. There is [STRIKE]an[/STRIKE] a writing activity in an English learning book that I'm studying. There are some topics and I chose this topic.
What was the exact topic/prompt, and how many words did the task say you should write?
 
The topic is fitting in. There wasn't a word number but it was suggesting two paragraphs, there wasn't really a limitation tho
 
contexts to fitting-in
 
Fitting in to a new social environment
 
There are three main contexts when it comes to fitting in: [STRIKE] context: [/STRIKE] fitting in a different group in terms of culture, race or religion, fitting in a different group in terms of class, and fitting in a different group in terms of personal traits.

In the context of [STRIKE] fitting in a different group or society in terms of [/STRIKE] culture, race or religion, the process can be really long. Because these concepts have profound effects on people, they [STRIKE] cover a big deal [/STRIKE] impact a large part of everyday life [ 1]. In addition, the group or the society has more responsibility in this context. This is because fitting in a different group in terms of these features can be quite traumatic and difficult for a person, especially if this person hadn't chosen willingly to be in that group or society. This can ….
[ 1]: At that point, your essay starts losing cohesion (the sentences don't connect well with each other). Also, a good body paragraph should follow a general-to-specific structure. That means it should present a general point and zoom in on it (with details and specifics) to persuade the reader.
Are you practising for IELTS?
 
I am learning English for academic purposes and IELTS/TOEFL provides me validation so yes I am preparing for it. I am trying to accomplish intermediate level. Actually I had completed but for a year I stopped studying English but now I am trying to get the things I forgot. Altough I have considerable vocabulary knowledge I lack grammar I guess. Thank you for your corrections. Haven't you found mistakes after "This can" or you just didn't continue because ıt wasn't worth. Is it that bad :-(
 
IELTS/TOEFL provides me validation so yes I am preparing for it.
What does that mean? Write a clear, simple and detailed answer if possible.

Actually I had completed but for a year I stopped studying English
What did you complete?

Haven't you found mistakes after "This can" or did you just [STRIKE]didn't[/STRIKE] not continue because ıt wasn't worth it? Is it that bad?
There are mistakes, but lack of cohesion is a more serious problem in an essay. I'll say more after you answer my questions above.
 
IELTS/TOEFL provides me validation so yes I am preparing for it

Wouldn't you be preparing for them as they are separate exams run by different bodies?
 
What does that mean? Write a clear, simple and detailed answer if possible.


What did you complete?


There are mistakes, but lack of cohesion is a more serious problem in an essay. I'll say more after you answer my questions above.

In order to become an academician I need have a license that shows I am fluent in English. There are some ways and TOEFL is one of them. I had completed intermediate level but I forgot some of it. Now I am trying to accomplish intermediate level.
 
Wouldn't you be preparing for them as they are separate exams run by different bodies?

He had mentioned IELTS. IELTS is also valid for academy but I will get TOEFL. That was the thing I was trying to say.
 
In order to become an academic[STRIKE]ian[/STRIKE], I need [STRIKE]have[/STRIKE] a certificate that shows I am fluent in English. There are several ways to get one, and TOEFL is one of them. I had completed intermediate level, but I forgot some of it. Now I am trying to reach intermediate level again.
That's a good project.

You can also say, "In order to teach . . . "
 
He had mentioned IELTS. IELTS is also valid for [STRIKE]academy[/STRIKE] academia but I will get TOEFL. That was [STRIKE]the thing[/STRIKE] what I was trying to say.

Who is "He"?
 
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