[Essay] Grammar and vocabulary check

[Arsalan.habib]

Hello,

 

[emsr2d2]

Re: Grammer and vocabulary check

Please edit your title to correct the spelling of "gramma​r".

You must capitalise "I" every time you write/type it. We "make" mistakes, not "do" them. It should be "enlighten" (bare infinitive) not "enlightened" (past tense).

You really need to look at your choice of tenses throughout. You have frequently used the present perfect of past perfect when the past simple would have sufficed.

 

[Arsalan.habib]

Re: Grammer and vocabulary check

Fair enough. Can you please highlight the incorrect grammar used.

 

[teechar]

I agree with emsr2d2's comment about your use of tense. I suggest you edit your post to fix that and to make your text simpler and easier to read. Cut out as much waffle as you can.