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Please read this sample of work submitted by a student. Imagine you have chosen to write comments underneath the text as a form of feedback. Write your comments in the answer box. Remember that the student is at her elementary level so keep your comments simple.
My sister is very pretty and good looking. She has beautiful straight black heair. She medium height, about 5 feet 5, I suppose, In her twenties, She have dark braun eyes. She slim and well built. She is wearing in blue T-shirt end jeans. Nadine very like the animals. She is veterinary surgeon. She like to swim and play tennis.
my answer
heair - SP
She medium height - GR
braun - SP
She is wearing in blue T-shirt end jeans - GR, (end) SP
Nadine very like the animals - GR
My sister is very pretty and good looking. She has beautiful straight black heair.(SP) She medium height,(P) about 5 feet 5, I suppose, In her twenties, She have dark braun(SP) eyes. She slim and well built.(P & GR) She is wearing in blue T-shirt end jeans.(GR) Nadine very like the animals. (GR) She is veterinary surgeon. She like to swim and play tennis.
is there anything else i can do to make this better?
My sister is very pretty and good looking. She has beautiful straight black heair. She medium height, about 5 feet 5, I suppose, In her twenties, She have dark braun eyes. She slim and well built. She is wearing in blue T-shirt end jeans. Nadine very like the animals. She is veterinary surgeon. She like to swim and play tennis.
my answer
heair - SP
She medium height - GR
braun - SP
She is wearing in blue T-shirt end jeans - GR, (end) SP
Nadine very like the animals - GR
My sister is very pretty and good looking. She has beautiful straight black heair.(SP) She medium height,(P) about 5 feet 5, I suppose, In her twenties, She have dark braun(SP) eyes. She slim and well built.(P & GR) She is wearing in blue T-shirt end jeans.(GR) Nadine very like the animals. (GR) She is veterinary surgeon. She like to swim and play tennis.
is there anything else i can do to make this better?