hanhnguyen
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Hi All,
I plan to take an IELTS exam next year, but writting task troubles me alot. Pls help to check and evaluate my essay if possible. Thank you all very much.
Topic: What should a government do for a country to become successful?
As the leader of a country the government plays a prerequisite role in its developing and its decision affects to society broadly. So, in my opinion, to drive a country to a success the government should strictly achieve the following goals: anti-corruption, improving economics and social benefits.
First and foremost, a government can not be strong if any corruption. Bribe not only spoils its members but also causes financial damage. Furthermore, it rapidly and likely loses all prestige from citizens, which can lead to politically unstable situation as rebel, terrors, and more organized crimes…. However, all these mentioned problems are only the internal matters, in external point of view this kind of country is easy to intervene or event defeat through its own bad governors. Eventually, the corrupted government will end with failures in all areas.
Secondly, the governors should put more efforts on economics growing as it is the fundamental basis to gain the country’s strength. A rich country could be better at finding a resolution independently for the same issue compared with the poorer one because it has enough financial resource to invest in all schemes such as upgrading education, enhancing the army and so on…
Last but not least, to maximize prestige from citizens, government should improve the social benefits system as subsidy, public health…which is for citizens’ sake. This investment contributes to level up the living standard and brings the actual thriving to citizens.
To sum up, all above goals are related and one can affects the other and reversely. Therefore, government should deploy all 3 projects thoroughly at the same time to ensure the greatest success.
I plan to take an IELTS exam next year, but writting task troubles me alot. Pls help to check and evaluate my essay if possible. Thank you all very much.
Topic: What should a government do for a country to become successful?
As the leader of a country the government plays a prerequisite role in its developing and its decision affects to society broadly. So, in my opinion, to drive a country to a success the government should strictly achieve the following goals: anti-corruption, improving economics and social benefits.
First and foremost, a government can not be strong if any corruption. Bribe not only spoils its members but also causes financial damage. Furthermore, it rapidly and likely loses all prestige from citizens, which can lead to politically unstable situation as rebel, terrors, and more organized crimes…. However, all these mentioned problems are only the internal matters, in external point of view this kind of country is easy to intervene or event defeat through its own bad governors. Eventually, the corrupted government will end with failures in all areas.
Secondly, the governors should put more efforts on economics growing as it is the fundamental basis to gain the country’s strength. A rich country could be better at finding a resolution independently for the same issue compared with the poorer one because it has enough financial resource to invest in all schemes such as upgrading education, enhancing the army and so on…
Last but not least, to maximize prestige from citizens, government should improve the social benefits system as subsidy, public health…which is for citizens’ sake. This investment contributes to level up the living standard and brings the actual thriving to citizens.
To sum up, all above goals are related and one can affects the other and reversely. Therefore, government should deploy all 3 projects thoroughly at the same time to ensure the greatest success.