.....his security pass was not lost

[JEic]

I want to rewrite this original sentence, using "Much to", but I am unsure if the two ways I wrote it are both grammatically correct.
I prefer (a) because I think the element of "him finding" should be included in the rewriting. If I am incorrect, kindly advise why. Thank you.

- Jayden was relieved to find that his pet dog was not missing.


My two ways of rewriting the above:

(a) Much to his relief, Jayden found that his pet dog was not missing.

(b) Much to Jayden's relief, his pet dog was not missing.

 

[tedmc]

(A) is good . I find (b) unnatural.

 

[emsr2d2]

I'd use (b) to make it clear that the person feeling relieved is Jayden. In (a), it could be another male person. Having said that, theoretically in (b), it could be another male person's dog that wasn't missing.

 

[jutfrank]

Sentence (a) is fine but sentence (b) lacks the verb found, so it isn't right. You mean this:

(b) Much to Jayden's relief, he found his pet dog was not missing.