IELTS Speaking P.2 Topic: a time when the weather prevented you from doing something

[Maybo]

This is a practice text for the speaking part of the IELTS exam. Please correct it and make it colloquial.

Topic:

Describe a time when the weather prevented you from doing something. You should say: (Source)

• what your plan was
• what weather you were hoping for
• what happened

and explain how you felt when you had to change your plans.

My response:
Five years ago, I was planning to travel to Singapore, but my passport was expired, so I made an appointment to renew it. I were hoping for a sunny day for the appointment. Unfortunately, there was a strong typhoon hitting Hong Kong. Almost everything shut down. I was very upset because time slots were full during that month. Maybe because it was near the travel season, people were urge to renew their passports.

At first, I still wished the typhoon would go away in the afternoon. I knew that if I missed that time slot, I would need to wait for another month. Also, I might have to reschedule all my flights and hotels' bookings, which could cause me to pay a great amount of money. What was worse, if my parents knew that, I was sure they would told me off. I really regretted my decision to renew my passport so late. I should have checked the expiration date earlier. At least five months before my trip would be ideal.

During my self-blaming, the weather got worse. I could feel my apartment was moving and I felt dizzy. That was the first time I'd felt my life was at stake. I didn't want my apartment to collapse. At that time, I almost forgot about my passport problem. However, I'll never forget that experience because it taught me to get everything ready earlier before going for a trip.

 

[emsr2d2]

Five years ago, I was planning to travel a trip to Singapore no comma here but my passport was had expired, so I made an appointment to renew it. I were was hoping for a sunny day for the appointment. Unfortunately, there was that day a strong typhoon hitting hit Hong Kong and almost everything shut down. I was very upset because all other time slots were full taken during that month. Maybe because it was nearly the travel season, people were urge eager to renew their passports.

At first, I still wished hoped the typhoon would go move away in by the afternoon. I knew that if I missed that time slot, I would need to wait for another month. Also, I might have to reschedule rebook all my flights and hotels, ' bookings, which could cost me a lot. cause me to pay a great amount of money. What was worse, if my parents knew that found out, I was sure they would told tell me off. I really regretted my decision to renew my passport so late. I should have checked the expiration date earlier. At least five months before my trip would be have been ideal.

During my self-blaming, While I was busy blaming myself, the weather got even worse. I could feel my apartment building was moving and I felt dizzy. That was the first time I'd felt my life was at stake in danger. [I didn't want my apartment the building to collapse.] At that time, It was so distracting, I almost forgot about my passport problem. However, I'll never forget that experience because it taught me to prepare everything in place earlier before going for on a trip.

See above. I don't really think you need to put "I didn't want the building to collapse". That's a given. No one wants their building to collapse!