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[thomas615]

Teacher, is this sentence all right?

Instead of setting up a meeting, would it be all right for me to set up a telephone conference since our client lives in the New Territories. She probably would not want to come all the way to Hong Kong for a short meeting.

 

[paul.moss]

Sounds allright, although it can still be improved.

 

[5jj]

Sounds allright, although it can still be improved.

It would be helpful if you suggested how. 'All right' is written as two words.

Your first sentence needs a comma after conference, thomas, and it should end with a question mark. Apart from those small points, both sentences are fine.

 

[paul.moss]

It would be helpful if you suggested how. 'All right' is written as two words.

Your first sentence needS a comma after conference, T homas, and it should end with a question mark. Apart from those small points, both sentences are fine.

The two sentences could be combined into one:
Since our client lives in the New Territories and would probably not want to come all the way to Honk Kong for a short meeeting, would it be possible for me to set up a telephone conference instead?

 

[BobK]

The two sentences could be combined into one:
Since our client lives in the New Territories and would probably not want to come all the way to Hon[STRIKE]k[/STRIKE]g Kong for a short meeeting, would it be possible for me to set up a telephone conference instead?

Glass houses and stone-throwing spring to mind. ;-) (I must admit to a feeling of regret that in some circles longer sentences are regarded as intrinsically better than short ones. "Jesus wept" has a certain power.)

b

 

[5jj]

Your first sentence needS a comma after conference, T homas, and it should end with a question mark.

The first of those was a typo. Thank you. I have now corrected it in the original. The second was not. This username begins with a lower-case t.

 

[emsr2d2]

Am I the only person that thinks a "conference call" is more commonly used than a "telephone conference"?

 

[BobK]

Am I the only person that thinks a "conference call" is more commonly used than a "telephone conference"?

No, you're not.

To my ear, it's 'conference call' but - inconsistently - 'video conference' [note, that's the old-fashioned closed-circuit TV sort - I've never haeard or made reference to one of the software-mediated conference, apart from online seminars called 'webinars' - but those, while involving some interaction, couldn't be called video conferences]. When I was on the red carpet at the ELTons last Wednesday (more of a red rug really ;-)) it was 'live-streamed'.

b

 

[5jj]

When I was on the red carpet at the ELTons last Wednesday (more of a red rug really ;-)) it was 'live-streamed'.

Congratulations, Bob.

nfire:

News takes a day or four to reach me, but it's still just as good to hear.