Is this correct?

[oryx]

Education is one of the main sectors in any country around the world. In addition of its impact on raising awareness, high rate of education is fundamental for any country in order to achieve high level of economic growth. For these reason, governments try to do the best to improve their education by support this sector financially. In the United Kingdom, the government set apart of its budget to education sector to support universities and schools also to help students to get a chance to study. In recent years, the UK government has faced deficit in their budget which led to cut education budget by almost forty per cent, however, the government made a decision to raise tuition fees to solve the problem. These tuition fees mean a funding tuition to students who study at universities and they are different from country to another in the United Kingdom. This essay will focus on evaluation the impact that happened to education budget due to the deficit in the UK budget, the decision of raising the tuition fees and what did government did in order to encourage students to go to the universities.


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Are there any mistake in this introduction?? If yes,, I would like to know ​

Many thanks ​

 

[oryx]

:-( I can not complete my essay until someone correct my introduction

 

[tedtmc]

Education is one of the main sectors in any country [STRIKE]around the world. [/STRIKE]

In addition of its [STRIKE]impact on[/STRIKE] role in raising awareness, a high [STRIKE]rate [/STRIKE] level of education is fundamental for any country [STRIKE]in order [/STRIKE]to achieve a high level of economic growth.


For these reasons, governments try to do their best to improve[STRIKE] their [/STRIKE]education by supporting this sector financially.

In the United Kingdom, the government sets part of its budget to the education sector to support universities and schools and also to help students [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] get a chance to study.

In recent years, the UK government has faced deficit in their budget which led to a cut in education budget by almost forty per cent,

However, the government made [STRIKE]a[/STRIKE] the decision to raise tuition fees to solve the problem.

These tuition fees mean a funding tuition to students who study at universities and they are different from country to another in the United Kingdom.
Do you mean 'tuition fees have hitherto been heavily subsidized by the government?

This essay will focus on [STRIKE]evaluation [/STRIKE] evaluating the impact[STRIKE] that happened to education budget due to the deficit in the UK budget[/STRIKE] of the budget deficit on on education, the decision of raising the tuition fees and [STRIKE]what did government did in order[/STRIKE] the action taken by the government to encourage students to go to the universities.

not a teacher

 

[oryx]

Many many thanks to you :up:

 

[oryx]

Can I write to obtain a chance , instead of get a chance to be more academic?

 

[emsr2d2]

Can I write to obtain a chance , instead of get a chance to be more academic?

No.

 

[oryx]

These tuition fees mean a funding tuition to students who study at universities and they are different from country to another in the United Kingdom.
Do you mean 'tuition fees have hitherto been heavily subsidized by the government?

No I just want a definition of tuition fees?? How can I write a definition for that??

 

[oryx]

This essay will focus on [STRIKE]evaluation [/STRIKE] evaluating the impact[STRIKE] that happened to education budget due to the deficit in the UK budget[/STRIKE] of the budget deficit on on education.

not a teacher

In the first paragraph,I want to talk about the deficit in the government budget and for that reason, the government cut the education budget

Does what you have written here,,mean the same?

 

[emsr2d2]

In the first paragraph,I want to talk about the deficit in the government budget and for that reason, the government cut the education budget

Does want you have written here,,mean the same?

They mean the same. You are going to explain why the budget deficit led the government to cutting the education budget, including raising tuition fees (student loans).

 

[oryx]

Thanks emsr2d2 and I want to ask you
Do you have a definition of tuition fees?

 

[emsr2d2]

Thanks emsr2d2 and I want to ask you
Do you have a definition of tuition fees?

It's the money paid by a university/college student in order to study. Sometimes the money is paid up front (at the beginning of the course). Sometimes, they "borrow" the money from the government (a student loan) and have to pay it back at a later date.