[Grammar] Is this paragraph phrased correctly?

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motico

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Is this paragraph phrased correctly? (Especially the conditional)
If you really engaged in fighting wrongdoings in the company (which nobody can deny their existence), many would joined you. But the unpleasant fact is that you are taking part in a campaign which aims at discrediting our company's reputation.
 

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(which nobody can deny their existence)- How about (and nobody denies that they exist)
 
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