Is U.S. becoming the nation of spectators?

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"The U.S. is becoming a nation of spectators-people who prefer to sit back and observe rather than a nation of doers." Why do you agree or disagree with the statement. Support your answer with examples. (persuasive essay for practice.)


The U.S. is one of the most advanced nations. Most people of the world want to visit and live in the United States because the people
made their country safe, comfortable, wealthy to live and enjoy. However, some people argue that modern generation is not paying attention to social and national issues, and busy in fulfilling their personal needs. I believe that the U.S. is a country of dedicated and hard working people and doers than only spectators.


In the U.S., education and skill level repidly increase. In last twenty to thirty years, the percentile of skilled people has increased six to eight times. Therefore, these edificated population creating more productions and more jobs; consequently, more progressed economy. Certainly, they are careful spectators too for the safety of the country.


Additionally,People's doers increase the U.S. prestige on the world platform in various international games such as Olympics and World-Cup. Most of the time, the number of medals has increased. Even in Olympics 2016, the U.S. won the highest number of medals. These are the proofs that people are not only spectators but also serious doers.


In conclusion, people of the U.S. manage many things excluding daily chores such as, volunteer in schools and communities, put efforts for their kids in sports and other activites, indulge in society etc. Like any other country's citizens, they love their nation, work hard, and show their presence on the world platform.
 

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Where did you find the title? It's not grammatically correct.
 

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That title/prompt is also rather vague.
 

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Your introduction may be usable, but not the rest of the essay, I'm afraid.

Again, let's do this one step at a time.

Think of two or three reasons to support the position you've taken. Write them out as separate points.
 

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1.The U.S. players are winning highest madels in various internation games such as Olympics which is possibe through hard work.
2. In U.S., many social and educational organisation run by vounteers free to aware people about health and environment.
3. The U.S. donating the highest amount to poor and needy countries which their people earned through working hard.
 

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What are "madels" (as you wrote in point 1)?
 

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It is spelling mistake. it is 'Medal' :oops:
 

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1.[STRIKE]The[/STRIKE] U.S. [STRIKE]players[/STRIKE] sportspeople are winning [STRIKE]highest[/STRIKE] plenty of [STRIKE]madels[/STRIKE] medals in various international games and competitions such as the Olympics, which is possible only through hard work.

2. In the U.S., many social and educational organisations are run by volunteers who provide their time and labour for free to help [STRIKE]aware[/STRIKE] other people in society. [STRIKE]about health and environment.[/STRIKE]

3. The U.S. economy is the largest in the world. That is a reflection of [STRIKE]donating the highest amount to poor and needy countries which their[/STRIKE] people [STRIKE]earned through[/STRIKE] working hard.

Use the above as topic sentences for three body paragraphs. Again, please pay attention to your spelling and punctuation.

Note that when you're referring to the actual country, use "the US", but when you're using "US" as an adjective, the definite article may not be necessary.
For example,
The US borders Mexico and Canada.
US trade links with Cuba are set to improve.
The US cities named in the survey were Dallas and Anchorage.
In the last sentence, we need the definite article because we are talking about specific cities.
 

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The U.S. sportspeople are winning plenty of medals in various international games and compitions which is possible only through hard work. Last year, U.S. won the highest numbers of medals in Olympics 2016 by continuing on the first position since several times.


In U.S., many social and educational organizations are run by volunteers who provide their time and labor for free to help other people in society. Their hard work and dedication keep improving the society, developing social bonds, and increasing educational level of people. All These doers have been made the counrty parts of attraction to the rest of countries.


The U.S. economy is the largest in the world that is a reflection of working hard people. They are not only rapidly increasing productions, sales, and cosumptions, but also improving and advancing the qualities of products. Moreover, U.S. is donating and helping to the needy and poor countries by providing them necessary things free or on low price.
 

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[STRIKE]The[/STRIKE] U.S. sportspeople are winning plenty of medals in various international games and competitions, which is possible only through hard work. For instance, last year, the U.S. won the highest number of medals in the 2016 Olympics. [STRIKE]2016[/STRIKE] by continuing on the first position since several times.


In U.S., many social and educational organizations are run by volunteers, who provide their time and labor for free to help other people in society. Their hard work and dedication [STRIKE]keep improving the[/STRIKE] are of immense benefit to society, developing social bonds, and increasing the educational level of many people. All these doers have been made the counrty parts of attraction to the rest of countries.


The U.S. economy is the largest in the world, and that is a true [STRIKE]reflection[/STRIKE] sign of hard-working [STRIKE]hard[/STRIKE] people. [STRIKE]They are not only rapidly increasing productions, sales, and cosumptions, but also improving and advancing the qualities of products. Moreover,[/STRIKE] In fact, the U.S. [STRIKE]is[/STRIKE] donates money to [STRIKE]ing[/STRIKE] and helps [STRIKE]ing to the[/STRIKE] many needy and poor countries, and all this as a result of the hard work done by people in the US. [STRIKE]by providing them necessary things free or on low price.[/STRIKE]

1- You're still making careless mistakes. Go over your work before submitting it.
2- I don't understand the part in blue.
3- The essay is somewhat short.
 
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