alpacinou
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- Sep 30, 2019
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- Persian
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- Iran
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- Iran
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Later that afternoon, Joe left the hotel for a walk. The late fall air was crisp and a tender breeze hummed through the treetops as he walked towards the the Hungerford Bridge. He strolled along the ledge of the bridge, stopping to take in the view, leaning forward against the railings. The low sun sparkled off ribbons of Thames, tinting a strip of clouds with an orange glimmer. Joe felt as though the fall in the outside world merged with the bleak autumn in his soul. The London Eye was an orange silhouette against the sky, towering over Big Ben. Joe turned his head and saw an elongated shadow getting closer to him. A tall man with a gray trench coat walked towards him, drew a pistol out and aimed at Joe. Joe's heart dropped in his stomach, and he gulped nervously. The tall man smiled and ran away without shooting.
Later that afternoon, Joe left the hotel for a walk. The late fall air was crisp and a tender breeze hummed through the treetops as he walked towards the the Hungerford Bridge. He strolled along the ledge of the bridge, stopping to take in the view, leaning forward against the railings. The low sun sparkled off ribbons of Thames, tinting a strip of clouds with an orange glimmer. Joe felt as though the fall in the outside world merged with the bleak autumn in his soul. The London Eye was an orange silhouette against the sky, towering over Big Ben. Joe turned his head and saw an elongated shadow getting closer to him. A tall man with a gray trench coat walked towards him, drew a pistol out and aimed at Joe. Joe's heart dropped in his stomach, and he gulped nervously. The tall man smiled and ran away without shooting.