Letter

[yslamac]

Can you please improve the letter below?:-D


Despite our repeatedly demand on your execution of the Formal Tenancy Agreement, but no response, we assume that you are no longer interested in taking over the premises and signing the Tenancy Agreement. Therefore, we refer you to the Clause 12 of Provisional Agreement where stipulates that if the Tenant fails to complete the deal on the specified date (i.e. 7[SUP]th[/SUP] Dec.98), the initial deposit paid in the sum of HK$1000 shall be forfeited to the Landlord and the premises will be let to the other party. Due to your default to complete the Tenancy, you are liable to compensate the Agency Costs.

We hereby serve you the formal notice that if the Formal Tenancy Agreement will not be signed on or before 22[SUP]nd[/SUP] December, 1998, the initial deposit paid of HK$1000 shall be forfeited and you are liable to all costs and damages incurred.

 

[teechar]

Can you please improve the letter below?:-D


Despite our repeatedly demand on your execution [What does that mean?] of the Formal Tenancy Agreement, but no response, we assume that you are no longer interested in taking over the premises and signing the Tenancy Agreement. Therefore, we refer you to the Clause 12 of Provisional Agreement where stipulates that if the Tenant fails to complete the deal on the specified date (i.e. 7[SUP]th[/SUP] Dec.98) [That was 18 years ago!], the initial deposit paid in the sum of HK$1000 shall be forfeited to the Landlord and the premises will be let to the other party [What other party?]. Due to your default to complete [What does that mean?] the Tenancy, you are liable to compensate the Agency Costs.

We hereby serve you the formal notice that if the Formal Tenancy Agreement will not be signed on or before 22[SUP]nd[/SUP] December, 1998 [Again, that date doesn't make sense!] , the initial deposit paid of HK$1000 shall be forfeited and you are liable to all costs and damages [What costs and damages?] incurred.

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[emsr2d2]

I think you meant "Due to your failure to complete ...". You seem to be mixing up the words "fail/failure", "fault" and "default". Check their definitions.