elzaku
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Hi to everyone!
It's the first time I write on this forum, even if I've often looked on it for comments/questions. I am applying for a Phd and I have to write a motivational letter. I am not a native English speaker, but I find my proficency satisfactory.
I wrote this letter, but I got a reply that it contains many errors. I've read it carefully but I've not found mistakes. Maybe some error in some grammatical construction?
I thank you a lot!!
[FONT=Times New Roman, serif]Dearall[/FONT]
[FONT=Times New Roman, serif]Iam XXX, currently a XXX at the XXX, and I would like to apply for the XXX Series PhD program in Mathematics at the University of XXX. Withmy educational background and experience, I strongly believe that Iam suitable candidate for the program. [/FONT]
[FONT=Times New Roman, serif]
Ihave always had a great passion for mathematics. The aspectwhich was, and still is, more seductive to me is the unique interplaybetween rigor and creativity which characterizes it. The maininstance has been when I learned that, in order to solve some veryhard conjecture about varieties over finite fields (at the time, myidea of geometric object was rather naive, but I was aware of theexistence of a wider class of objects) Grothendieck managed to gluetogether arbitrary commutative rings in order to define the rightnotion of geometric space. With this at hand, not only the problemturned out to be solvable, but it was also possible to formulate andsolve arithmetic problems in purely geometric terms.[/FONT]
[FONT=Times New Roman, serif]Duringmy studies, I was an active student. I have been professor aide inproblem solving sections in Abstract Algebra for two years. Myresponsibilities were to solve various problems about the topic forstudents and to supervise students learning. Furthermore, I was amathematics tutor. I gave private lessons in Basic Mathematics,Analysis, Abstract Algebra and Linear Algebra to undergraduatestudents of mathematics as well as other fields. These experiencesimproved my leadership, responsibility and creativity. I have alsogiven talks about topics in Algebra, Geometry and Algebraic NumberTheory and educational lectures in General Mathematics andArithmetic. All this gave me the opportunity to increase my skills inorder to speak in front both of a wide heterogeneous audience and anacademic one. [/FONT]
[FONT=Times New Roman, serif]Lastyear I applied, and was accepted, for a PhD at the XXX. I immediately accepted a subject concerning theextension of Milnor's [/FONT][FONT=Times New Roman, serif]K[/FONT][FONT=Times New Roman, serif]-theoryto Arakelov varieties, driven also by the idea to move to France.Shortly after I realized that my first choice, XXX, the one whichhad been indicated to me at first, was actually the right choice andthat it has been a mistake not to follow that advise. In any case, Iwon't consider this year as a total waste of time: besides thepersonal experience of living abroad alone, I had the opportunity toexpand my scientific background by being introduced to new things,such as algebraic [/FONT][FONT=Times New Roman, serif]K[/FONT][FONT=Times New Roman, serif]-theoryand Berkovich analytic spaces, by maintaining up-to-date knowledgeabout research lines in geometry and number theory and lastly bydeepening my background knowledge, for example by getting tounderstand and appreciate the ideas and techniques behind thesolution of Weil's conjectures.[/FONT]
[FONT=Times New Roman, serif]TheGeometry Group in Padova has a distinguished research status. Theresearch level is international, the environment is stimulating, andthe projects are extremely interesting. In particular, I am excitedby the idea of pursuing the research line undertaken in the lastyears by Profs. XXX and XXX as well as by some of theirstudents in order to establish good reduction criteria for varietiesover finite extensions of p-adicrational numbers. I believe that I will be a positive addition to theteam, fit well in the organization and be a useful member of thecommunity. Since your programs perfectly match my research interestsand profile and in view of my curriculum and background, I believethat I am an ideal candidate for a place and I would be honored to beaccepted as a PhD student.[/FONT]
[FONT=Times New Roman, serif]Thankyou very much for your time and consideration. [/FONT]
It's the first time I write on this forum, even if I've often looked on it for comments/questions. I am applying for a Phd and I have to write a motivational letter. I am not a native English speaker, but I find my proficency satisfactory.
I wrote this letter, but I got a reply that it contains many errors. I've read it carefully but I've not found mistakes. Maybe some error in some grammatical construction?
I thank you a lot!!
[FONT=Times New Roman, serif]Dearall[/FONT]
[FONT=Times New Roman, serif]Iam XXX, currently a XXX at the XXX, and I would like to apply for the XXX Series PhD program in Mathematics at the University of XXX. Withmy educational background and experience, I strongly believe that Iam suitable candidate for the program. [/FONT]
[FONT=Times New Roman, serif]
Ihave always had a great passion for mathematics. The aspectwhich was, and still is, more seductive to me is the unique interplaybetween rigor and creativity which characterizes it. The maininstance has been when I learned that, in order to solve some veryhard conjecture about varieties over finite fields (at the time, myidea of geometric object was rather naive, but I was aware of theexistence of a wider class of objects) Grothendieck managed to gluetogether arbitrary commutative rings in order to define the rightnotion of geometric space. With this at hand, not only the problemturned out to be solvable, but it was also possible to formulate andsolve arithmetic problems in purely geometric terms.[/FONT]
[FONT=Times New Roman, serif]Duringmy studies, I was an active student. I have been professor aide inproblem solving sections in Abstract Algebra for two years. Myresponsibilities were to solve various problems about the topic forstudents and to supervise students learning. Furthermore, I was amathematics tutor. I gave private lessons in Basic Mathematics,Analysis, Abstract Algebra and Linear Algebra to undergraduatestudents of mathematics as well as other fields. These experiencesimproved my leadership, responsibility and creativity. I have alsogiven talks about topics in Algebra, Geometry and Algebraic NumberTheory and educational lectures in General Mathematics andArithmetic. All this gave me the opportunity to increase my skills inorder to speak in front both of a wide heterogeneous audience and anacademic one. [/FONT]
[FONT=Times New Roman, serif]Lastyear I applied, and was accepted, for a PhD at the XXX. I immediately accepted a subject concerning theextension of Milnor's [/FONT][FONT=Times New Roman, serif]K[/FONT][FONT=Times New Roman, serif]-theoryto Arakelov varieties, driven also by the idea to move to France.Shortly after I realized that my first choice, XXX, the one whichhad been indicated to me at first, was actually the right choice andthat it has been a mistake not to follow that advise. In any case, Iwon't consider this year as a total waste of time: besides thepersonal experience of living abroad alone, I had the opportunity toexpand my scientific background by being introduced to new things,such as algebraic [/FONT][FONT=Times New Roman, serif]K[/FONT][FONT=Times New Roman, serif]-theoryand Berkovich analytic spaces, by maintaining up-to-date knowledgeabout research lines in geometry and number theory and lastly bydeepening my background knowledge, for example by getting tounderstand and appreciate the ideas and techniques behind thesolution of Weil's conjectures.[/FONT]
[FONT=Times New Roman, serif]TheGeometry Group in Padova has a distinguished research status. Theresearch level is international, the environment is stimulating, andthe projects are extremely interesting. In particular, I am excitedby the idea of pursuing the research line undertaken in the lastyears by Profs. XXX and XXX as well as by some of theirstudents in order to establish good reduction criteria for varietiesover finite extensions of p-adicrational numbers. I believe that I will be a positive addition to theteam, fit well in the organization and be a useful member of thecommunity. Since your programs perfectly match my research interestsand profile and in view of my curriculum and background, I believethat I am an ideal candidate for a place and I would be honored to beaccepted as a PhD student.[/FONT]
[FONT=Times New Roman, serif]Thankyou very much for your time and consideration. [/FONT]