Verona_82
Senior Member
- Joined
- Oct 15, 2010
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- Native Language
- Russian
- Home Country
- Russian Federation
- Current Location
- Ukraine
Hello,
I'm trying to correct a clumsy sentence and would like to know if the corrected version sounds more or less natural:
The original:
...this money is enough for renovation, but not so much that officials could steal a big sum without anyone notice it.
My try:
....this money is enough for renovation, but not so much to enable officials to steal a big part of it without anyone noticing it.
But I still don't like it. I'd be grateful for your comments.
I'm trying to correct a clumsy sentence and would like to know if the corrected version sounds more or less natural:
The original:
...this money is enough for renovation, but not so much that officials could steal a big sum without anyone notice it.
My try:
....this money is enough for renovation, but not so much to enable officials to steal a big part of it without anyone noticing it.
But I still don't like it. I'd be grateful for your comments.