Nowadays you must have seen that kids are less active. They sit in front of the lapto

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Nowadays you must have seen that kids are less active. They sit in front of the laptops, android phones, TVs, play stations. These devices emit rays that are harmful for our eyes and health. So can we say "Kids bodies are not enough strong to "take" or "endure" or "tackle" the rays that are emitted out of these gadgets. That is why a lot of kids have to wear specks nowadays"?
 

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Could you please check my sentences?
 

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[STRIKE]Nowadays[/STRIKE] You must have [STRIKE]seen[/STRIKE] noticed that kids are less active nowadays. They sit in front of their laptops, [STRIKE]android[/STRIKE] mobile/cell phones, TVs and PlayStations. These devices emit rays that are harmful [STRIKE]for[/STRIKE] to our eyes and health. [STRIKE]So can we say[/STRIKE] Kids' bodies are not [STRIKE]enough[/STRIKE] strong enough to [STRIKE]"take" or "endure" or "tackle"[/STRIKE] withstand the rays that are emitted [STRIKE]out of[/STRIKE] by these gadgets. That is why a lot of kids have to wear [STRIKE]specks[/STRIKE] specs/glasses/spectacles nowadays.

See above.

It doesn't really make sense to say that their entire bodies can't deal with the rays but then be so specific about them wearing glasses. I'd change "bodies" to "eyes". If you keep "bodies", come up with a different ending.
 
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