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Adam Cruge

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This is my writing, please make necessary corrections....
Hoping against hope that something interesting would happen, I stood by my window, facing the harbor. The day had long gone to sleep and melted into evening; the arc of the moon already topped over our buildings and on the horizon the tiny moving dots, made by the lights of the fishing boats were a real beauty to behold. Around the street lights some fire-flies were flattering round. I was devouring this beauty for I didn't know how long. I almost lost track of time, suddenly some sharp sound startled me, brought back to reality. An ambulance with siren blaring and light flashing, veered to the right at the turn-off to our locality. Finally it squealed to a skidding halt at my next door.
 

shroob

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Not a teacher but I'll give it a go...

Hoping against hope that something interesting would happen, I stood by my window, facing the harbor. The day had long gone to sleep and melted into evening; the arc of the moon was already peaking over the buildings and on the horizon, the tiny moving dots made by the lights of the fishing boats were a real sight to behold. Fire flies were fluttering around the streetlights. I was engrossed in this beauty for I don't know how long. I almost lost track of time, when suddenly, a sharp sound startled me, bringing me back to reality. An ambulance with its siren blaring and lights flashing, had veered to the right at the turn-off my road. Finally it squealed to a skidding halt at my neighbours.

Hope this helps.
 

Rover_KE

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Not a teacher but I'll give it a go...

Hoping against hope that something interesting would happen, I stood by my window, facing the harbor. The day had long gone to sleep and melted into evening; the arc of the moon was already peeking over the buildings and on the horizon, the tiny moving dots made by the lights of the fishing boats were a real sight to behold. Fireflies were fluttering around the streetlights. I was engrossed in this beauty for I don't know how long. I almost lost track of time, when suddenly, a sharp sound startled me, bringing me back to reality. An ambulance with its siren blaring and lights flashing had veered to the right at the turn-off to my road. Finally it squealed to a skidding halt next door.

Hope this helps.


Good effort, Shroob.
I've just changed a few things.

Rover
 
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