rodgers white
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- Joined
- Jan 17, 2016
- Member Type
- English Teacher
- Native Language
- Chinese
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- China
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- China
Hi, there. Recently, I have been doing a practical writing served as a possible version for my students. It is about making a survey on students’ future career choice after graduation. Please help me proofread and polish it.
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Our school has made a survey among the Senior 1 students about what to do after graduation. As many as about 40% of the girls choose to become accountants. However, boys are most interested in becoming businessmen. Only a few boys want to be teachers. Interestingly, the number of boys and girls who want to become doctors is equal. As for policeman, more boys expect to have this job. However, about 10% of the students are not clear about their future.
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Thanks to this forum, I have the opportunity to make my writing more authentic and cohesive. So please accept my thanks in advance.
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Our school has made a survey among the Senior 1 students about what to do after graduation. As many as about 40% of the girls choose to become accountants. However, boys are most interested in becoming businessmen. Only a few boys want to be teachers. Interestingly, the number of boys and girls who want to become doctors is equal. As for policeman, more boys expect to have this job. However, about 10% of the students are not clear about their future.
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Thanks to this forum, I have the opportunity to make my writing more authentic and cohesive. So please accept my thanks in advance.
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