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engr.yasir ali bhatti

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[B]Asian Labour In Textile Sector
In some of Asian countries Textile labour is illiterate and many time they do lot of mistakes.
Some time they loss their life during working under machines. We should create awareness among labours and try to arrange Labour awareness trainings because they are the are the back bone of textile industry and we are the responsible of their lives.
 
[B]Asian Labour In Textile Sector
In some of Asian countries Textile labour is illiterate and many time they do lot of mistakes.
Some time they loss their life during working under machines. We should create awareness among labours and try to arrange Labour awareness trainings because they are the are the back bone of textile industry and we are the responsible of their lives.

Please try to punctuate it yourself first (if you haven't already done so in this post) and we will comment. Thank you.
 
Asian Labour In Textile Sector

In some of Asian countries,Textile labour is illiterate and many time they do lot of mistakes.
Some time they loss their life during working under machines. We should create awareness among labours and try to arrange Labour awareness trainings because they are the are the back bone of textile industry and we are the responsible of their lives.


Please check it now
 
The punctuation is fine but there are a lot of problems with the text.

Rover
 
The punctuation is fine but there are a lot of problems with the text.

Rover

With the use of capital letters as well.

- not a teacher -
 
Text problem. Sorry would you like to tell how?
 
Text problem. Sorry would you like to tell how?

For example, your first sentence. You wrote:

"In some of Asian countries,Textile labour is illiterate and many time they do lot of mistakes."

I have underlined the main errors. It should read something along the lines of:

"In some Asian countries, the people who work in the textile industry are illiterate and they often make mistakes."
 
*Not a teacher.

Yasir, I have tried to rectify some of your mistakes in the following paragraph. Now lets see what the teacher have to say.

Asian Labour In Textile Sector

In some of the Asian countries, textile labourers are illiterate, and hence prone to make blunders/serious mistakes-some of which prove fatal- while working on heavy machinery. We must realize that these labourers are the backbone of textile industry in those countries. So, we should try and create/raise awareness among labourers and arrange training programs for them, so that they may work efficiently and without risking lives.
 
Great!!!!
thanks All of You..
 
Its Miss not Sir as I am concern..
 
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