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I want to write an loan application to my office director ( it is importer company ) the reason of my writing an application is that I want buy a frigid and repaint my home there for I need Rs/= xxxxxx but I can not any idea who can I start the application. Please provide me the loan application sample.
 

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I want to write an loan application to my office director ( it is importer company ) the reason of my writing an application is that I want buy a frigid and repaint my home there for I need Rs/= xxxxxx but I can not any idea who can I start the application. Please provide me the loan application sample.

I am respectfully requesting a loan of Rs xxxxx to enable me to purchase a refrigerator and to repaint my home.

I hope that is what you are asking.
 

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pls suggest me the complete format of the letter. for explain

i m working in your firm as an Accountant. The reason of my writing i want to purchase a refrigerator and to repaint my home therefor I am respectfully requesting a loan of Rs xxxxx to enable me to purchase a refrigerator and to repaint my home.
 

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pls suggest me the complete format of the letter. for explain

[STRIKE]i m working in[/STRIKE]I am currently employed by your firm as an Accountant. The reason for my writing [STRIKE]i want to purchase a refrigerator and to repaint my home therefor I am respectfully requesting[/STRIKE] is to request a loan of Rs xxxxx to enable me to purchase a refrigerator and to repaint my home.

That is how I would write it. I hope that is helpful.
 

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thanks for your helping sir, but i m not satisfied.

Respected Sir,
I would like to bring your kind attention to the following few lines for sympathetic consideration.
With all due respect, I am requesting your good office a sum of Rs. 60,000 (Sixty Thousand) as loan to Purchase a Refrigerator and Repaint to my home. Kindly consider this subject as early as possible.
I will be so grateful for your kind consideration and positive action.
Best Regards,


please check sir it is perfect?
 

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You are asking for something that does not exist in our culture. We would never, ever ask our employers for a loan.

Additionally, the language you use, like "for your sympathetic consideration," would be considered overly flowery and sound absurd in a business setting.

Therefore, you need the write the letter the way it sounds right to you, because nothing about it will sound right to me.

However, you definitely need to use lower-case letters for purchase, refrigerator, and repaint.
 

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thanks for your helping sir, but i m not satisfied.

Respected Sir,
I would like to bring your kind attention to the following few lines for sympathetic consideration.
With all due respect, I am requesting your good office a sum of Rs. 60,000 (Sixty Thousand) as loan to Purchase a Refrigerator and Repaint to my home. Kindly consider this subject as early as possible.
I will be so grateful for your kind consideration and positive action.
Best Regards,


please check sir it is perfect?

It is not the way I would say it but it sounds fine. Perhaps it is the way you write a letter in your country. I agree that you need to do it in your own style.
 

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if you Doesn’t like my style so kindly change it for me because i think if you Doesn’t not like my letter style then my boss also Doesn’t like it. so pls change it.
 

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You are asking for something that does not exist in our culture. We would never, ever ask our employers for a loan.

We could ask for an advance, though- is that done in the States?
 

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It's certainly not common in corporate America. It may be more common in small businesses. The only time I've ever seen it is in movies set several decades ago, when men still wore hats.
 

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If they didn't get the advance, they could use their hats when begging in the street.
 

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Shouldn't the title be "provide me with..." ?

Thanks for the reply in advance.
 

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not a teacher

Your style of writing is overly long-winded yet does not address certain important points to back up your request - why you deserve to be given the loan and how you propose to repay the loan.
 

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thanks for your helping sir, but i m not satisfied.

Respected Sir,
I would like to bring your kind attention to the following few lines for sympathetic consideration.
With all due respect, I am requesting your good office a sum of Rs. 60,000 (Sixty Thousand) as loan to Purchase a Refrigerator and Repaint to my home. Kindly consider this subject as early as possible.
I will be so grateful for your kind consideration and positive action.
Best Regards,


please check sir it is perfect?

Is your boss Pakistani? If he is, and if Pakistani bosses are anything like Indian bosses, your letter is fine.
 

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Is your boss Pakistani? If he is, and if Pakistani bosses are anything like Indian bosses, your letter is fine.


Oh really? Do you mean that's their style or writing or they are generous people? :)
 

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Oh really? Do you mean that's their style or writing or they are generous people? :)
That is their style of writing and if you write to them in that way, they are more likely to be generous.
 
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