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- Jan 17, 2016
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- English Teacher
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Hi there. Would you please proofread the following text? Any help would be appreciated.
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Gan backed up until he was in the cavern again, and none too soon, he could hear the bears entering the cave. At first, it was just like two humans chit-chatting, but then, the mother’s tone changed, and the child was silent. He could hear them sniffing at the air. Mama bear was just a few metres away at the entrance of the passageway, too big to enter.
Gan took off his backpack and looked for what he needed. Sure, he had a bow, but shooting her with arrows would only make her angry. What he needed instead were fire and smoke. At the bottom of his pack, he found what he was looking for, a small metal flask that contained a flammable liquid. After first covering his mouth with a thick cotton cloth he took off his leather shirt and liberally poured contents of the flask on to it and then wrapped it quickly around the burning torch.
The flame of the torch went out for a moment, and then the oily liquid and shirt ignited, a thick black smoke issued out of the now flamed shirt. Gan, holding the torch at arms-length, walked back towards the bears that were already able to smell the oily smoke and were sounding very nervous.
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Gan backed up until he was in the cavern again, and none too soon, he could hear the bears entering the cave. At first, it was just like two humans chit-chatting, but then, the mother’s tone changed, and the child was silent. He could hear them sniffing at the air. Mama bear was just a few metres away at the entrance of the passageway, too big to enter.
Gan took off his backpack and looked for what he needed. Sure, he had a bow, but shooting her with arrows would only make her angry. What he needed instead were fire and smoke. At the bottom of his pack, he found what he was looking for, a small metal flask that contained a flammable liquid. After first covering his mouth with a thick cotton cloth he took off his leather shirt and liberally poured contents of the flask on to it and then wrapped it quickly around the burning torch.
The flame of the torch went out for a moment, and then the oily liquid and shirt ignited, a thick black smoke issued out of the now flamed shirt. Gan, holding the torch at arms-length, walked back towards the bears that were already able to smell the oily smoke and were sounding very nervous.
