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[youngms24]

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Repression of the Shadow​

Emotions control your thinking, behavior and actions toward others. Emotions also affect your physical bodies as much as your body affects your feelings and thinking. People who repress their emotions or who they really are may be setting themselves up for physical illness. Robert Johnsons, “Owning your own Shadow” explains the breakdown of a person’s character. He starts off by saying the persona is how we want to be seen, the ego is what we really are and the shadow is these repressed emotions and the part that were always trying to hide. His theory on this so-called shadow is illustrated in “The Strange case of Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hide” by Robert L. Stevenson by showing how a person can switch off who they perceive to be and who they really are and never fully become one. Dr. Jekyll is an honorable and respected man who made this potion which switches him into being Mr. Hide which is a shameful and evil man that would go and commit the most awful things, this was Dr. Jekyll’ shadow. As the story goes on it comes down to a point where this potion no longer functions correctly. Dr. Jekyll begins to switch off characters in plain daylight or in unsuspected times. Johnson’s theory provides answers and examples on how Dr. Jekyll should have confronted this shadow of his. A shadow can get the best of you if you repress it so much, a better way to stabilize this inner side of you may be to balance it out. A person can do this by accepting characteristics that society may not fully accept and realize that keeping this “seesaw” unbalanced can break at the fulcrum point. Accepting who you really are and all the characteristics that come with it can make you a much happier person.
Robert Bly believes that a shadow originates with a cultural/civilized process, when a person begins to pick and choose the good vs. bad characteristics as shown in Dr. Jekyll when he begins to name all his faults and acceptable traits. “things separate into good and evil, and we begin the shadow-making process; we divide our lives” says Bly, as a person separates these two things they begin to repress all the unacceptable parts of them, and as this shadow begins to form a person begins to not be themselves anymore but instead be what society wants them to be. Dr. Jekyll recognizes that he has this “profound duplicity of life”, he says both sides are who he is but he is not one person instead he is broken into two beings which are Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde, but in Bly’s word he would say “he has only substituted one side of his seesaw for the other and made no lasting gain”. The problem with this would be that this unbalanced duplicity may get to a breaking point in a persons life.

 

[Raymott]

Repression of the Shadow​

Emotions control your thinking, behavior and actions toward others. Emotions also affect your physical bodies as much as your body affects your feelings and thinking. People who repress their emotions or who they really are may be setting themselves up for physical illness. Robert Johnsons, “Owning your own Shadow” explains the breakdown of a person’s character. He starts off by saying the persona is how we want to be seen, the ego is what we really are and the shadow is these repressed emotions and the part that were always trying to hide. His theory on this so-called shadow is illustrated in “The Strange case of Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hide” by Robert L. Stevenson by showing how a person can switch off who they perceive to be and who they really are and never fully become one. Dr. Jekyll is an honorable and respected man who made this potion which switches him into being Mr. Hide which is a shameful and evil man that would go and commit the most awful things, this was Dr. Jekyll’ shadow.
I'd rewrite the whole previous sentence.
As the story goes on it comes down to a point where this potion no longer functions correctly. Dr. Jekyll begins to switch off characters in plain daylight or in unsuspected times. Johnson’s theory provides answers and examples on how Dr. Jekyll should have confronted this shadow of his. A shadow can get the best of you if you repress it so much, a better way to stabilize this inner side of you may be to balance it out. A person can do this by accepting characteristics that society may not fully accept and realize that keeping this “seesaw” unbalanced can break at the fulcrum point. Accepting who you really are and all the characteristics that come with it can make you a much happier person.
Robert Bly believes that a shadow originates with a cultural/civilized process, when a person begins to pick and choose the good vs. bad characteristics as shown in Dr. Jekyll when he begins to name all his faults and acceptable traits. “things separate into good and evil, and we begin the shadow-making process; we divide our lives” says Bly [ref?], as a person separates these two things they begin to repress all the unacceptable parts of them, and as this shadow begins to form a person begins to not be themselves anymore but instead be what society wants them to be. Dr. Jekyll recognizes that he has this “profound duplicity of life” [], he says both sides are who he is but he is not one person instead he is broken into two beings which are Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde, but in Bly’s word he would say “he has only substituted one side of his seesaw for the other and made no lasting gain”. The problem with this would be that this unbalanced duplicity may get to a breaking point in a persons life.

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