ambitious-girl
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I wonder if someone could check the following for any mistakes.
NB I was trying to make come changes to serve as an essay not a talk. I hope I was doing well.
Shanghai, with a population of around 23.5 million, is currently the fifth of all the world’s megacities. Its location on the mouth of the Yangtze River Delta in eastern China makes it one of the busiest and (the) most important ports in the world. The city of Shanghai is so vibrant and fascinating that as visitors, on your arrival/as soon as you arrive in, you will be hit by an explosion of sounds, sights and smells. The street is a place where to read and relax as well as eat and play. It serves as an extension of the workplace as well. For example, hair stylists sit their customers on chairs which are outside their salons to cut their hair and the city is full of food stalls on every street corner piled high with delicious steamed buns filled with meat, vegetables and mushrooms. This is known to be a common sight of Shanghai. Food and friendship are said to go hand in hand here. Along with food stalls, there are a lot of sidewalk cafes in which people often meet and socialize. The city of Shanghai offers a fusion of West and East and old and new. It/This means that visitors who are staying at some of the brand new five-star hotels can explore the ancient Buddhist temples when they go sightseeing, which is considered as the best aspect of living here. As far as crime is concerned, Shanghai is a relatively safe place to live in. You rarely hear of crimes which are being committed, although pickpockets are known to operate in crowded areas and tourists are sometimes the target for scams. The most common of these consist of/include unofficial taxi drivers overcharging passengers for the ride to their hotels from the airport, or bar owners getting an accomplice to bring unsuspecting tourists to their bars only to present them with a terribly high check when they try to leave. However, in general, the Chinese/Chinese are very friendly and hospitable to foreigners and they treat travelers with a lot of respect. Nonnative residents are said to usually become good friends with their Chinese neighbours, once they have gotten used to each other. What really is irritating about this megacity is that as well as sidewalk, it is the roads where/that are often choked with traffic. The traffic/It is so terrible that during rush hour it takes two hours or more to drive a 30-minute route. In addition, in general, drivers don’t like to follow the rules of the road and regularly ignore the speed limits and traffic lights. As a result, this makes crossing the road or street really/extremely hazardous for pedestrians, whose safety are not guaranteed.
NB I was trying to make come changes to serve as an essay not a talk. I hope I was doing well.
Shanghai, with a population of around 23.5 million, is currently the fifth of all the world’s megacities. Its location on the mouth of the Yangtze River Delta in eastern China makes it one of the busiest and (the) most important ports in the world. The city of Shanghai is so vibrant and fascinating that as visitors, on your arrival/as soon as you arrive in, you will be hit by an explosion of sounds, sights and smells. The street is a place where to read and relax as well as eat and play. It serves as an extension of the workplace as well. For example, hair stylists sit their customers on chairs which are outside their salons to cut their hair and the city is full of food stalls on every street corner piled high with delicious steamed buns filled with meat, vegetables and mushrooms. This is known to be a common sight of Shanghai. Food and friendship are said to go hand in hand here. Along with food stalls, there are a lot of sidewalk cafes in which people often meet and socialize. The city of Shanghai offers a fusion of West and East and old and new. It/This means that visitors who are staying at some of the brand new five-star hotels can explore the ancient Buddhist temples when they go sightseeing, which is considered as the best aspect of living here. As far as crime is concerned, Shanghai is a relatively safe place to live in. You rarely hear of crimes which are being committed, although pickpockets are known to operate in crowded areas and tourists are sometimes the target for scams. The most common of these consist of/include unofficial taxi drivers overcharging passengers for the ride to their hotels from the airport, or bar owners getting an accomplice to bring unsuspecting tourists to their bars only to present them with a terribly high check when they try to leave. However, in general, the Chinese/Chinese are very friendly and hospitable to foreigners and they treat travelers with a lot of respect. Nonnative residents are said to usually become good friends with their Chinese neighbours, once they have gotten used to each other. What really is irritating about this megacity is that as well as sidewalk, it is the roads where/that are often choked with traffic. The traffic/It is so terrible that during rush hour it takes two hours or more to drive a 30-minute route. In addition, in general, drivers don’t like to follow the rules of the road and regularly ignore the speed limits and traffic lights. As a result, this makes crossing the road or street really/extremely hazardous for pedestrians, whose safety are not guaranteed.
