... shape our lives for the best ...

[Odessa Dawn]

I derive satisfaction from understanding troubling questions about human life and help shape our lives for the best to make this world a better place. My goal is to continue carrying out the clinical psychology research to develop theories in this field and discover new facts to apply them to real-world situations.


Would you help correct that content?

 

[Tarheel]

I would rewrite the first sentence to make it two sentences.

 

[Tarheel]

Is that research something you have been doing, or was it started by somebody else?

 

[Odessa Dawn]

Two sentences:

I derive satisfaction from understanding troubling questions about human life. And I would love to shape our lives for the best to make this world a better place.

 

[Odessa Dawn]

That research something started by the applicant himself. Not me. We Arab students write first in Arabic, and then translate into English.

 

[Odessa Dawn]

Would you recommend that I post the other sections of CV here?

 

[Tarheel]

Two sentences:

I derive satisfaction from understanding troubling questions about human life. And I would love to shape our lives for the best to make this world a better place.

It"s much clearer that way. Better!

 

[Tarheel]

That research something started by the applicant himself. Not me. We Arab students write first in Arabic, and then translate into English.

So it's not for you?

 

[Tarheel]

Would you recommend that I post the other sections of *the* CV here?

If you have posted part of it here, you might as well post the rest of it here.

(Please note that I am not a moderator.)

 

[Tarheel]

Perhaps:

My goal is to continue carrying out the clinical psychology research to develop theories in this field.

It would, I think, be a good idea to point out who is doing the research and what it is about. (At some point I will want to delete "carrying out".)

 

[Tarheel]

And:

And I want to make new discoveries that can be applied to real world situations.

 

[Odessa Dawn]

It's not for me. Thank you for your time.

 

[emsr2d2]

It's not for me.

What does that mean?

 

[Rover_KE]

Please tell the person you are advising to register with us and ask his/her own questions.

We are not happy with members acting on behalf of third parties.

 

[Odessa Dawn]

@emsr: That CV isn't mine.

 

[emsr2d2]

Yes, I think we worked that out. The request in Rover's last post (#14) stands.

 

[Tarheel]

One more thing.

I derive satisfaction from understanding troubling questions about human life. And I would love to shape our lives for the best to make this world a better place.

I think "better" works better than "best" there.

The phrase "shape our lives" is easily enough understood. It's about influencing people in a positive way, right?

 

[Odessa Dawn]

Yes, it is.