[Essay] Statement of Purpose

[Arsalan.habib]

Hey,
I have drafted a motiovational letter for addmision in MS program. Just wondering if someone can evaluate or review my letter. Its not complete yet still in process. Just curious to know how did i wrote till now. Please enlightened me if i am wrong and how can i improve.

Thanks in Advance

 

[Tarheel]

Let's first look at your intro.

Say:

I have drafted a motivational letter for admission to an MS program.

And:

It's not complete.

And:

I am curious to know how I am doing so far.

And:

Please point out my mistakes and suggest improvements.

 

[Tarheel]

It's = It is