Erbab
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- Aug 22, 2016
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- Turkish
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- Turkey
I am trying to improve my writing skills for a proficiency exam,and therefore I have written this essay. If you help me to correct my mistakes, I will be greatful.
Considering career, differences can be observed between one who participates in university clubs and one who does not participate in them. When someone applies for a job, he or she needs to show his or her qualifications to be chosen by the employer. At this stage, If the student has participated in university clubs, it probably takes employer's attention. On the other hand, If someone does not participate in university clubs, he or she maybe can not find anything which needs to be displayed. Another difference is that students who participate in university clubs can explore their abilities and therefore, they may plan their career properly. But students who do not participate in university clubs plan their career hardly. In brief, career may seem a difference between these two students' lives.
Leadership abilities may be another difference between these students. If someone can learn how to cooperate with his or her workmates, it improves his or her leadership abilities. University clubs provide students this chance to collaborate with their friends. On the other side, those who do not participate in university clubs need to improve this ability in different ways.
All in all, career and leadership abilities are believed to be two of differences between these two students. It is clear that opportunities which we meet during our lives such as university clubs maybe have a great effect on our future
University clubs
There is no doubt that university life has a huge influence on our life standarts. This period of our lives, of course, provides us numerous opportunities which may broaden our horizons and improve our self-confidence. University clubs may be considered as one of these opportunities. There are,therefore, some differences between those who participate in university clubs and those who do not participate in them, two of which may be regarded as career and leadership abilities. Considering career, differences can be observed between one who participates in university clubs and one who does not participate in them. When someone applies for a job, he or she needs to show his or her qualifications to be chosen by the employer. At this stage, If the student has participated in university clubs, it probably takes employer's attention. On the other hand, If someone does not participate in university clubs, he or she maybe can not find anything which needs to be displayed. Another difference is that students who participate in university clubs can explore their abilities and therefore, they may plan their career properly. But students who do not participate in university clubs plan their career hardly. In brief, career may seem a difference between these two students' lives.
Leadership abilities may be another difference between these students. If someone can learn how to cooperate with his or her workmates, it improves his or her leadership abilities. University clubs provide students this chance to collaborate with their friends. On the other side, those who do not participate in university clubs need to improve this ability in different ways.
All in all, career and leadership abilities are believed to be two of differences between these two students. It is clear that opportunities which we meet during our lives such as university clubs maybe have a great effect on our future