take added importance

[alpacinou]

I want to suggest that nowadays, the world is a global village in which communication has become more important. Can I use "take on an added importance"?

What do you think about this?

The world has become a global village. The Internet has taken on an added importance as an indispensable communication too in a connected world.

How can I make smoother? I don't wanna eliminate any words.

 

[jutfrank]

No, it's not right. Or at least, the thought does not seem to be very clear. When are you suggesting that the internet was not as important?

Also, you've made a rather glaring typo. Can you spot it?

 

[alpacinou]

No, it's not right. Or at least, the thought does not seem to be very clear. When are you suggesting that the internet was not as important?

Also, you've made a rather glaring typo. Can you spot it?

Yes the typo is "tool".

Maybe I can make the argument that ever since the pandemic broke out, the Internet became all the more important.

What do you think about this?

The COVID-19 pandemic has restricted people's movement. The Internet has taken on an added importance as an indispensable tool for communication and teleworking during the pandemic.

 

[jutfrank]

Maybe I can make the argument that ever since the pandemic broke out, the Internet became all the more important.

Yes, that's a reasonable line. You'd have to make it clear that that's what you mean.

What do you think about this?

The COVID-19 pandemic has restricted people's movement. The Internet has taken on an added importance as an indispensable tool for communication and teleworking during the pandemic.

I don't like it.

The two sentences lack logical coherence. The first talks about the restriction of movement. The second talks about communication. I do understand how you are relating these two sentences logically in your mind, but this does not translate well on the page.

You need to link the two ideas much more strongly. Perhaps you could find a suitable linking phrase.

Also, if you must use the idea of 'taking on an added importance', you need to make clear since when.

 

[alpacinou]

Yes, that's a reasonable line. You'd have to make it clear that that's what you mean.

I don't like it.

The two sentences lack logical coherence. The first talks about the restriction of movement. The second talks about communication. I do understand how you are relating these two sentences logically in your mind, but this does not translate well on the page.

You need to link the two ideas much more strongly. Perhaps you could find a suitable linking phrase.

Also, if you must use the idea of 'taking on an added importance', you need to make clear since when.

Do you think using "consequently" as a linking phrase can fix it?

The COVID-19 pandemic has restricted people's movement. Consequently, the Internet has taken on an added importance as an indispensable tool for communication and teleworking during the pandemic.

What is your suggestion?

 

[jutfrank]

Good. That's much better. That's just the kind of word I was talking about.

It's a particularly good choice because it creates both a causal and a temporal link. Very well done. :up:

 

[emsr2d2]

I don't [STRIKE]wanna[/STRIKE] want to eliminate any words.

I think you've been here long enough to know that we discourage the use of non-standard terms such as "wanna" and "gonna".