The electricity keeps coming and going.

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(Tom to his group of friends over skype)"Today we are facing power cuts. I think there is something wrong with one of the electricity poles or transformer. The electricity keeps coming and going. The electricity comes and goes within the gap of five minutes so I don't know for how long will I be able to stay with you or continue with you guys. If the electricity goes off again, my connection will get disconnected."

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(Tom to his group of friends over Skype.)

"Today we are facing power cuts. I think there is something wrong with one of the electricity poles or transformer. The electricity keeps coming and going. The electricity comes and goes within the gap of five minutes so I don't know for how long will I be able to stay with you or continue with you guys. If the electricity goes off again, my connection will get disconnected."

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It's very long-winded.

"There's a problem with the electricity [supply] today. It's going on and off every five minutes so I'm sorry if we suddenly get cut off."
 

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It's very long-winded.

"There's a problem with the electricity [supply] today. It's going on and off every five minutes so I'm sorry if we suddenly get cut off."

Could you please check my sentences as well, whether they are grammatical or not? Especially I would like to know about "connection will get disconnected and how long will I be able to stay with you."
 
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"Connection will get disconnected" is not very natural even though it's grammatically correct. It's the repetition of "connection" that makes it clunky. Maybe "I don't know how long I'll be able to stay online [talking to you] before I get disconnected".
 

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Today we are facing power cuts. I think there is something wrong with one of the electricity poles or transformer.

Is it correct to use "electricity poles"?
 

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As long as these are what you're talking about, yes.
 

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It's very long-winded.

Generally, we try to say things succinctly- long-winded explanations that include unnecessary information rarely help. Your version does the same job in one line.
 
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