[Essay] think differently

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Let me talk about my hobbies. For one thing, I love reading comic books. The reasons are as follows. First, comic books are fun to read. Reading comics makes me relaxed, and it also helps me widen imagination, gain interest in reading, and improve inferencing skills. Next, comic books use complex language which improves my verbal intelligence. They not only make me smarter but also teach me to think differently. Last, comic books also teach positive messages, like helping others, doing one’s best, working as a team, and perseverance.

For another thing, I love playing on-line games. There are some reasons for this. To begin with, playing on-line games can be exciting, entertaining, and challenging. Games like taking care of a virtual pet like horse games or building cities, puzzles and more can be quite fun. Secondly, I enjoy competing with other players to prove to my friends that I’m the best. I find it very rewarding to win the game and get to the next level. Thirdly, I love being immersed in a fantasy world where I can do something that I could not normally do in real life through this game. Lastly, I can get support from others and find something to talk about. Thus, I feel like I belong to a group and have social interaction.

 

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Let me talk about my hobbies. For one thing, I love reading comic books. The reasons are as follows. First, comic books are fun to read. Reading comics makes me relaxed, and it also helps me [STRIKE]widen[/STRIKE] broaden my imagination, [STRIKE]gain[/STRIKE] increase my interest in reading, and improve [STRIKE]inferencing[/STRIKE] my deductive skills. Next, comic books use complex language which improves my verbal intelligence. They not only make me smarter but also teach me to think differently. Last, comic books also teach positive messages, like helping others, doing one’s best, working as a team, and perseverance.

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