[General] Title sentence

[Pal_slg]

Hi,

While describing a place in a short title sentence can the following be accepted?

'Name of the place' - A famous hill station in the Himalayas with historical mythology against stunning backdrop of mighty Himalayan peaks and colourful country side, with old monasteries, churches, vibrant hill tribes, colonial buildings and exotic variety of orchids and flowers.

Thanks for correcting this.

Pal

 

[emsr2d2]

Hi,

While describing a place in a short title sentence can the following be accepted?

'Name of the place' - A famous hill station in the Himalayas with historical mythology against a stunning backdrop of mighty Himalayan peaks and colourful country side, with old monasteries, churches, vibrant hill tribes, colonial buildings and an exotic variety (or "exotic varieties" with no article) of orchids and flowers.

Thanks for correcting this.

Pal

See above.

 

[Raymott]

Hi,

While describing a place in a short title sentence can the following be accepted?

'Name of the place' - A famous hill station in the Himalayas with historical mythology against stunning backdrop of mighty Himalayan peaks and colourful country side, with old monasteries, churches, vibrant hill tribes, colonial buildings and exotic variety of orchids and flowers.

Thanks for correcting this.

Pal

It's not a sentence.
I'm not sure of the role of 'Name of the place' in this text. Such constructions don't belong in essays. This might be acceptable in a newspaper article or a travelogue.
Besides, after the lengthy description, you haven't even named the place.

 

[emsr2d2]

It's not a sentence.
I'm not sure of the role of 'Name of the place' in this text. Such constructions don't belong in essays. This might be acceptable in a newspaper article or a travelogue.
Besides, after the lengthy description, you haven't even named the place.

I assumed that in the finished article, "Name of the place" would be replaced with the actual name of the place!

Brighton - a seaside town famous for its Pavilion and pier.

If that is the case, then a capital "A" is not required, but lower case. I missed that the first time.

 

[Raymott]

I assumed that in the finished article, "Name of the place" would be replaced with the actual name of the place!

Brighton - a seaside town famous for its Pavilion and pier.

If that is the case, then a capital "A" is not required, but lower case. I missed that the first time.

Oh, I see. It still wouldn't be a sentence though, but maybe a sentence isn't needed.

 

[emsr2d2]

Oh, I see. It still wouldn't be a sentence though, but maybe a sentence isn't needed.

Agreed, but as a title it would work don't you think? Maybe I don't mean a title! I wouldn't have a problem with it as the first sentence of an article about a specific place.

Failing that, of course, if the dash is replaced with "is", then it's a sentence.

 

[Pal_slg]

Oh, I see. It still wouldn't be a sentence though, but maybe a sentence isn't needed.

Infact I wanted to describe a place named Darjeeling, a popular tourist place in the Himalayas. But before going for a long essay i wanted to give a tiltle for it. The word 'is' was not used intentionally. Is it better to break the long sentence into several short ones?

 

[emsr2d2]

Infact I wanted to describe a place named Darjeeling, a popular tourist place in the Himalayas. But before going for a long essay i wanted to give a tiltle for it. The word 'is' was not used intentionally. Is it better to break the long sentence into several short ones?

The paragraph that you posted originally would be too long for a title, though!

If the title was perhaps "Darjeeling - a popular place in the Himalayas", and the rest of the post was the actual article, then that would be better.