White Hat
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- Aug 14, 2011
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- Interested in Language
- Native Language
- Russian
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- Russian Federation
- Current Location
- Russian Federation
Dear forumers, I need your opinion on this sentence here:
Canada has been welcoming higher, when compared to global average, numbers of immigrants of various religious denominations such as Christian, Sikh, Buddhist and non-religious.
I wonder if the when compared to global average part reads well here. Thank you very much.
Canada has been welcoming higher, when compared to global average, numbers of immigrants of various religious denominations such as Christian, Sikh, Buddhist and non-religious.
I wonder if the when compared to global average part reads well here. Thank you very much.