need help in replacing a sentence

[ajaysharma]

i want to confirm if my atm pin is correct

i'm unsatisfactory with my last sentence"So I would be needing transaction." any other changes will be appreciated



Respected Sir/Madam,
I have been in India since a year I want to know any process through which I can confirm my ATM pin as I’m not sure of it , b’coz I’ll be coming back again to u.s.a for a short duration. So I would be needing transaction.

Yours truthfully,
XXX

[wise owl]

Hi,
Allow me to make some changes:


Respected Sir/Madam,

I have been in India since a year 2008 (write the year number)* and I would like to know what is the procedure which I can of confirming my ATM pin. as I’m not sure of it. I’ll be coming back again to U.S.A for a short duration. So I would be needing transaction.**

Yours truthfully,
XXX[/QUOTE]

* If you were in India a year ago and you are not there anymore, then you should say: I was in India a year ago/I spent a year in India.
If you have been in India for a year and you are still there, then you should say: I have been in India since 2008...

**So I would be needing transaction - what do you mean by this sentence? That you are planning to make money transfers through ATM? or that you will need cash money out of the ATM?

You can say: I’ll be coming back again to U.S.A for a short duration and have to make some transactions.





Hope it helped!